Magnificent_Bastard Posted October 2, 2006 Share Posted October 2, 2006 I'm with this guy man...We want a Machinima of this! I will lend voice! Donations, whatever! Hell you could bind the whole collection @ a kinko's and sell it! Hurry up with the next chapters already! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted October 3, 2006 Share Posted October 3, 2006 Wow! I'm sure gonna read all of this. I didn't know it existed. Wow! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
palaric8 Posted October 10, 2006 Share Posted October 10, 2006 bump when is the new chapter out? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted October 10, 2006 Share Posted October 10, 2006 Lol. I wsa gonna bump this sooner or later. PK must be busy. We must wait like we want to wait for VCS. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PresidentKiller Posted October 13, 2006 Author Share Posted October 13, 2006 (edited) You know how things are, so I'm sorry again. Here's chapter 38, I hope you like it. The Penthouse Crime Lobby, Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:10 PM The Staunton Blvd. Apartments building doesn’t look as glamorous as other luxurious residences and apartments in the city, and its lobby is no exception. The very simplistic and unimpressive decoration leaves much to be desired. Many Zaibatsu Emergency Response Team (ZERT) members are guarding the place. Satoshi Honatsu comes inside and takes a good look at the surroundings. Satoshi Honatsu: “This is such a sad place.” A ZERT member approaches Honatsu. ZERT Member: “Mr. Honatsu, Mr. Powell and some ZERT crime scene investigators are currently at the penthouse. Take the private elevator on the back of the lobby, it’s already unlocked.” Honatsu: “Good.” Satoshi Honatsu walks to the back side of the lobby and takes the elevator. The ZERT member goes back to his position guarding the front door. Penthouse, Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:15 PM Satoshi Honatsu comes out of the elevator into the penthouse’s entrance hall. There’re some ZERT members that nod at Honatsu when they see him. The decoration is a little bit more pleasing than the overall decoration of the rest of the building. Many plants and nature-related paintings populate the hall. Honatsu walks around a little until he finds a crime scene investigator. Investigator: “Good night, Mr. Honatsu. They’re in the pool at the roof garden upstairs.” The investigator points at the staircase behind him. Investigator: “It’s a little messy, let me tell you...” Honatsu: “All right.” Honatsu takes the stairs all the way to the top and finally comes out to a garden with a very spectacular view of the city on the left side, while all the commotion is on the opposite side. Honatsu slowly approaches the people near the pool. When he finally gets there, he notices the red-colored water and two floating naked dead bodies: a very beautiful woman with several gun-shots in the chest, and Marvin, who apparently shot himself in the forehead. An opened-up box of condoms is laying next to the pool while a couple of investigators are retrieving a gun from the bottom of the pool. James Powell is sitting in a patio chair just next to the pool, he seems to be in shock. Honatsu quietly talks to a ZERT member in the scene for a few seconds and then walks towards Powell, sitting on the chair next to his. Honatsu: “James, you have no idea how sorry I am. This is just terrible. That son of a bitch!” Powell doesn’t say anything, but some tears come out from his eyes. Honatsu: “You should leave this place and get some rest. There’s no point in staying here.” The investigators take some final pictures of the bodies and finally take them out of the bloody pool. Powell stands up. Powell: “I’m not leaving; I just want to be alone.” Honatsu also stands up. Honatsu: “The investigators will be looking for some clues and all that crap, they won’t be leaving this place in at least two or three hours.” Powell looks at Honatsu. Powell (angry): “What kind of clues do they want? Isn’t it obvious what happened here while I was away?” Honatsu: “I can’t believe they had an affair... Did you check the surveillance equipment?” Powell: “It was all f*cked up too, but I wouldn’t be able to watch them anyway. I just couldn’t see it.” Honatsu: “Did you have cameras in your house too?” Powell: “Not really, but now I wish I had. I would’ve killed them myself!” Honatsu: “I wonder how long they have been seeing each other...” Powell: “Not for very long, I guess. She didn’t like champagne, or at least she told me she didn’t like it.” Honatsu quickly looks back and curses quietly. Powell: “What?” Honatsu: “Nothing. I think I’m leaving now. It’s really late. Listen, take some days off, you need them.” Powell: “All right, thanks for stopping by.” Honatsu: “No problem. Just go on with your life, it seems she wasn’t worth it anyway.” Powell: “Yeah, I guess...” Honatsu gives Powell a pat on the back and leaves. Powell just stands there, still looking at the bloody pool. Lobby, Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:28 PM Honatsu comes out from the private elevator. Honatsu (thinking): “Damn it! f*cking champagne!” Honatsu gets out of the building. Penthouse, Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:29 PM James Powell goes downstairs to the living room. A crime scene investigator approaches him. Investigator: “I guess I don’t need to tell you what happened there.” Powell: “Please, save yourself the hassle. I know perfectly what happened there.” Investigator: “A couple of investigators will continue to search for clues, but the rest of us are leaving now...” Powell: “All right.” The investigator takes out an envelope from his jacket. Investigator: “You have to read those, sign them and take them to the police station tomorrow morning at 8 AM.” Powell: “Yeah, don’t worry about that. Listen, I need an aspirin so I’m headed for the kitchen.” Investigator: “All right. See you tomorrow.” Powell: “Yeah...” The investigator and several other men leave the place. Powell goes to the kitchen and takes a bottle of water out of the fridge. Powell: “Now, where are the aspirins?” Powell begins looking around the kitchen for aspirins, but he finds nothing. Powell: “I’ll ask the guys upstairs... after all, they already wrecked the place looking for clues.” Powell goes back upstairs. The two remaining investigators are inside the pool looking for something. Powell: “What are you doing? I thought you already looked there.” One of the investigators quickly looks at Powell. Investigator: “Oh, we’re just looking for any remaining bullets to take them to ballistics.” Powell: “All right. Hey, listen, do you have any aspirins?” Investigator: “We have some downstairs in the van.” Powell: “You don’t mind if I go and take them, right? I mean, you being busy and all.” Investigator: “Don’t worry, Mr. Powell. Go ahead and take them.” Powell: “All right, thanks.” Powell goes back downstairs and takes the elevator to the lobby. Lobby, Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:36 PM The place is completely empty. Powell comes out of the elevator and looks around. Powell: “They left in such a hurry...” Powell walks to the front door and goes outside. Outside Staunton Blvd. Apartments – Liberty Campus, Liberty City - Autumn 2001 Monday – 11:37 PM Powell looks around. The streets are deserted and the only vehicle in sight is a ZERT van. Powell: “That must be the investigator’s van. I mean, there’re no other vehicles around.” Powell takes the nearby stairs and approaches the van, but he suddenly remembers something. Powell: “Damn it! I hope it’s unlocked!” Powell is about to reach the van when he notices something shiny in a nearby grassy area that belongs to the university next to the apartments. Powell: “What in heaven is that?” Powell walks towards the shiny object to take a closer look. Powell: “Good Lord!” Read Chapters 39 and 40 Edited April 28, 2010 by PresidentKiller Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 Great chapter PK! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted October 13, 2006 Share Posted October 13, 2006 Nice one man Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Hill Posted October 14, 2006 Share Posted October 14, 2006 Another fantastic chapter. Great job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted October 14, 2006 Share Posted October 14, 2006 Awesome Chapter, PK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla Shake Posted October 14, 2006 Share Posted October 14, 2006 Great Chapter!!! TC718 / <629 / CF5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted October 16, 2006 Share Posted October 16, 2006 Excellent, PK. The conspiracy thing is awesome. Really shows the talent and depth of your writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
palaric8 Posted October 19, 2006 Share Posted October 19, 2006 I forgot some of the characters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pranjal Posted October 20, 2006 Share Posted October 20, 2006 What happened ? Is he not posting anymore? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla Shake Posted October 20, 2006 Share Posted October 20, 2006 He's posting, but ya' gotta remember: he's got a life of his own, and with any life I'd imagine, comes responsibilities. He's probably been really busy lately, and he'll get to posting whenever he gets the chance. TC718 / <629 / CF5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
palaric8 Posted October 20, 2006 Share Posted October 20, 2006 he is 21,so he got a girlfrien(or boy),work,etc.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob Saccamano Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 PK, I have been following your story for a while now, and while I do think it's excellent, I have three minor, minor, complaints. 1. You should be a little bit more descriptive in the character's appearances. 2. When dealing with the Liberty City mobsters, how come the names have to be so old-fashioned Italian? Alfredo, Fabrizio, Francesco, and Fabio? 3. I'd like to hear from Fabrizio Leone. What's going on his corner of the world? Keep up the good work, and i can't wait till the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted November 11, 2006 Share Posted November 11, 2006 I finally got around to reading every chapter, It took a long time but it was worth it, hopefully not too long for the next chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gaja 90 Posted November 12, 2006 Share Posted November 12, 2006 Man this story is great , but why did you stop posting? Shame on you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted November 12, 2006 Share Posted November 12, 2006 The guy has a real life too. He will post when he wants to, stop pestering him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
palaric8 Posted December 5, 2006 Share Posted December 5, 2006 teh bump pls keep tihs story alive...is teh only one good enough to keep updating...apart from kippers story and cuban warlord story.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magnificent_Bastard Posted December 21, 2006 Share Posted December 21, 2006 COME BACK PK COME BACK AND FINISH THE STORY! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
deathtopalaric8 Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Palaric, if you keep doing what you're doing, I'll keep doing what I'm doing untill this one story that you actually enjoy and rate good is at zero percent. You keep spamming everyone elses topics downwards, I'll keep spamming this one downwards, even if I do enjoy it. If it's the only way to get through to you, then I will. You wanted to play games, well, we're playing now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sinful Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Palaric, if you keep doing what you're doing, I'll keep doing what I'm doing untill this one story that you actually enjoy and rate good is at zero percent. You keep spamming everyone elses topics downwards, I'll keep spamming this one downwards, even if I do enjoy it. If it's the only way to get through to you, then I will. You wanted to play games, well, we're playing now. What the hell? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snape_kills_Dumblebore Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 (edited) where's president killer anyways? Edited December 27, 2006 by Snape_kills_Dumblebore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Snape_kills_Dumblebore and deathtopalaric8 are palaric8. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Snape_kills_Dumblebore and deathtopalaric8 are palaric8. That's funny. deathtopalaric8 has better grammar than the real palaric. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Snape_kills_Dumblebore and deathtopalaric8 are palaric8. Snape_kills_Dumblebore is Palaric8, the other dude, is someone who like me, is pissed off with Palaric8. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Snape_kills_Dumblebore and deathtopalaric8 are palaric8. Snape is Deathto isn't I know who it is Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted December 27, 2006 Share Posted December 27, 2006 Who? It defiantly ain't me if you think that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
varondandy Posted December 28, 2006 Share Posted December 28, 2006 Snape_kills_Dumblebore and deathtopalaric8 are palaric8. Snape is Deathto isn't I know who it is is not really hard to tell ..haha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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