Quantcast

Jump to content

» «
Photo

Where can I get feedback on my scripts?

  • This topic is locked This topic is locked
7 replies to this topic
JaberDoe
  • JaberDoe

    Rolly-Polly-Olly

  • Members
  • Joined: 23 Dec 2017
  • United-States

#1

Posted 6 days ago

Anybody know of any place/forum/site where I could post what I've done and get some feedback?

I've tried Reddit and I didn't get much from there.

 

Thanks in advance.

 


Leftist Bastard
  • Leftist Bastard

    Like tears in rain

  • Daily Globe
  • Joined: 29 Jan 2017
  • Syria
  • Best New Member 2017

#2

Posted 6 days ago

I mean...no reason you can't try here.


JaberDoe
  • JaberDoe

    Rolly-Polly-Olly

  • Members
  • Joined: 23 Dec 2017
  • United-States

#3

Posted 6 days ago Edited by JaberDoe, 6 days ago.

Well, okay then, lol.

 

Here goes (might make a separate topic anyway):

 

Episode #1 http://docdro.id/8qbAbCw

Episode #2 http://docdro.id/xlKfE54

Episode #3 http://docdro.id/sYFbvio

Episode #4 http://docdro.id/zN03HUT

Episode #4.5 http://docdro.id/1QCUkNb

Episode #5 (Finale) http://docdro.id/M5lM9dP

 

It's total of ~60pgs and I know the thing is completely bonkers/nonsensical.

I want to know if I am writing scripts in a way that is effective and whether I need to improve my formatting, etc.

 

If you do give feedback, that'd be awesome and appreciated.

Thanks!


Leftist Bastard
  • Leftist Bastard

    Like tears in rain

  • Daily Globe
  • Joined: 29 Jan 2017
  • Syria
  • Best New Member 2017

#4

Posted 6 days ago

I think me and others here would be able to better serve you if we had some kind of pitch or frame work to look at it through. General ideas, comparable movies/TV shows, what are your goals with this/what you want to get across etc.

 

While it is possible to judge a script without context it helps.


JaberDoe
  • JaberDoe

    Rolly-Polly-Olly

  • Members
  • Joined: 23 Dec 2017
  • United-States

#5

Posted 6 days ago

Ah, right, for sure!

Guess It'll be best to make a separate topic then.  I'll get on that ASAP.

Thanks for the help, bud.  


Craig
  • Craig

    Biographer Seahorse

  • Moderator
  • Joined: 14 Sep 2007
  • Canary-Islands
  • Best Writer 2011
    Time Traveller Of The Year 1984

#6

Posted 6 days ago

We do have a dedicated section for writers to share and showcase their work. It isn't the most active place in the world but it's a better fit there than anywhere else. I'll move this topic over there for you to save you making a new topic altogether.


JaberDoe
  • JaberDoe

    Rolly-Polly-Olly

  • Members
  • Joined: 23 Dec 2017
  • United-States

#7

Posted 6 days ago Edited by JaberDoe, 6 days ago.

Gotcha!  I've already made another topic anyways because I thought it'll be too long, but guess I'll post it here also for maximum exposure.

 

I’ve basically done this “mini-series” for the sake of improving my writing by means of practice, so because it’s my first script it is beyond rough.

There was a basic plot outline, but I pretty much changed so much and wrote down what came to me it’s unrecognizable from what it originally was.

 

Plot summary:

 

“A hitman gets hired by a mysterious figure who turns out to be psychotic.  This leads our character, Const, to spiral down a hole of parallel universes, clones(?), accidental self-murder and talking vegetables.”

 

I know it's completely ridiculous.

 

I was inspired a lot by Quantum Leap, Inception, Hannibal and David Lynch’s stuff in some ways.

 

Basically, I want to know if my writing and formatting are up to snuff, whether my dialogue makes sense, and in what ways I need to improve to work on proper screenplays.

 

Anyways, without further blah-blah, here are the links to all 5½ episodes (total: ~60pgs):

 

Episode #1 http://docdro.id/8qbAbCw

Episode #2 http://docdro.id/xlKfE54

Episode #3 http://docdro.id/sYFbvio

Episode #4 http://docdro.id/zN03HUT

Episode #4.5 http://docdro.id/1QCUkNb

Episode #5 (Finale) http://docdro.id/M5lM9dP

 

Thanks for any comments/feedback.


Craig
  • Craig

    Biographer Seahorse

  • Moderator
  • Joined: 14 Sep 2007
  • Canary-Islands
  • Best Writer 2011
    Time Traveller Of The Year 1984

#8

Posted 6 days ago

Alright, well I'll lock this one then and you can use the new one for feedback to keep it cleaner.





1 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 1 guests, 0 anonymous users