Amazing MP, so far. Pretty complex, with lots of characters. Not too many playable parts but its okay. Your grammar is exceptionally good, I found one grammar mistake though, I'm sure it wasn't intentional though. I was thinking about writing about some things but they might include spoilers. I know, I know, I can just put the "BBCode"
to mask stuff but still.
As long as you put it in the [spoiler], it's okay to write about elements or events of the story. Thanks for the feedback btw, I'm really glad you liked.