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#1

Posted 28 April 2017 - 05:12 PM Edited by YasirRFL King, A week ago.

Hello Everyone,
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This is Yasir RFL with new MP 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 0202 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 0202'The real heroes are the Army Man'
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Story---
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An attack has happened suddenly in Los Santos ,No one is safe02
Everyone is running or getting killed by the Terrorist.
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Anyone don't know who is behind this.Cheif Andrej tells Commisioner Patrick that the attack on Los Santos .Patrick advice Andrej that to get ready the Team DYOM.
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Characters)
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1.Commander Patrick
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One of the most powerful assain in 1994,He get promoted after the 1st commander retire.
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2.Chief andrej
He joined army to wipe out terrorism,he get promoted due to his true duty toward his aim.
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3.Huzaifa
A special soldier that is expert in air battle.
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4.Aftab
He also known as the Eagle Eye of Team Dyom.
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5.Yasir
The Best gunman and expert in bomb difuser.
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6.Dhiman
02He has the power to give the fear of milatry veihcles.Bb026XC.jpg
7.GYA
02Anyone said one shot KO.Meet GYA.jDMk33e.jpg
(Some characters are on hold)
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02Great Reviews

Following are the things I am going to focus. All rating are accounted for your mission pack.02
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  • Spelling Mistake
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  • Cutscenes
  • Object&Pickup
  • Length
  • Difficulty
  • Presentation
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Grammar -02(Grammar also include punctuation. You have to put some serious amount of time on your grammar. Not as a hater but actually I saw02many errors during playing mission also02Punctuation02need some more attention first after Grammar. Vast number of mistakes in0202Punctation was caught. Maybe it is because you were new in the community at that time or you need to face some improvements)
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Spelling Mistakes -0202 (There were many spelling mistakes like "safly" etc but it was good. I saw many fixes of spellings in02missions but still, I was watching the existence so this obtains yellow02colour)
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Plot -02 (Good I mean really. That was a good idea making something unique which contains Real life Designers but their roles were not impressive. I was expecting something better from them according to their skills IRL)
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Cutscenes -02(Cutscenes placements and their movements were good especially when there was a meeting in the office. Rotations were good. I am impressed with the cutscenes but still, I need more impressment)
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Object&Pickup Placements -02(Seriously, the objects placements were not good. They were like half of their corner was through the other near object like there is no collision in them + inappropriate objects for mission and that cue ball on the actor's head was really unrealistic)
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Length -02(Too short mission but long distance checkpoints were making the missions longer + I was not able to read and understand the cutscenes as they were concluding soo fast. Please avoid from the short cutscenes as they disturb many designers)
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Difficulty -02(Difficulty was very easy. Easy enemies + given a hunter to kill 250 health people)
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Presentation -02(I was going to give it a yellow but when I deleted the colourful hud and fonts then they were looking good. Using green in the colourful text with white in a right position was good but presenting your name in a very colourful way was a new member just joined the community. I want you to keep it up)
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+ there were some things like putting a cage for jumping from the top was really unrealistic and too many enemies in first mission was really absurd. Punctuation was bad and too much capital letter.02
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+OVERALL -026\10
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Try to improve on mentioned mistakes and weakness02and you will be awesome!
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Intro Version=
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Army Men get ready: Los Santos in danger
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Mission Pack
http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/50707
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Stay Tuned for more
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(Realesed)
Next Chapter will be progressing!
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#2

Posted 28 April 2017 - 06:50 PM

Nice, but you forgot the Pictures of the characters,  Maintexts.
Seems great, i'm excited

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#3

Posted 29 April 2017 - 04:32 AM

Nice, but you forgot the Pictures of the characters,  Maintexts.
Seems great, i'm excited

Thanks Next, look like you enjoyed it.


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Posted 29 April 2017 - 05:36 AM

Oy man,i am in roll on your mission.
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Posted 29 April 2017 - 07:36 AM

Oy man,i am in roll on your mission.


Yeah Fatin my friend
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Posted 29 April 2017 - 08:55 AM

Nice.

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Posted 29 April 2017 - 10:52 AM

Thanks Delaware


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Posted 29 April 2017 - 11:14 AM

Nice mission, bro. But I suggest you to put some pictures and some headers. Anyway goodluck for this.

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Posted 29 April 2017 - 11:17 AM

You should add some pictures and images. It'll be great if you do that. Btw, story looks great. I'm waiting for it! :D

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Posted 29 April 2017 - 12:42 PM Edited by YasirRFL King, 29 April 2017 - 12:43 PM.

Thank you Reza and Jhan my friends.

Yeah i will update the pictures soon.
So ,stay tuned
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Posted 29 April 2017 - 03:45 PM

Finally Make half of 3rd mission will upload 2 days later

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Posted 01 May 2017 - 09:09 AM

OKAY , Here mission three realeas now u can enjoy it

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#13

Posted 02 May 2017 - 01:36 PM

Character Images Update

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Posted 02 May 2017 - 03:31 PM

Wow. Nice story mate.And you take names from our nicknames it would Amazing!


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Posted 02 May 2017 - 05:05 PM

I just love how it's supposed to take place in America yet all the names are Indian.

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Posted 03 May 2017 - 02:09 AM

Not all names are indian bro, some from Americans and Pakistan

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#17

Posted 03 May 2017 - 02:13 PM

It's still an awful lot for America but I dunno how accurate you want that to be or not.

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Posted 03 May 2017 - 02:20 PM

Its awful because it contains lots of Indian and Pakistani names,not many Americans names.
That names are from my gta forums friends and its only a MP. So no big deal.
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Posted 07 May 2017 - 07:27 AM Edited by YasirRFL King, 17 May 2017 - 05:08 AM.

Ok , Guys the Beta 0.8 will realeas 2 days later.
So stay tuned

Edit: sorry guys , will upload it soon !

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Posted 30 November 2017 - 10:30 AM

UPDATE

 

BETA 0.8 has released. :lol: 

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Posted 30 November 2017 - 12:29 PM

Where is my name :(  and Upload you MP on DYOM Site 
I will play this just wait for my feeback   I'll give u Review about your MP 


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#22

Posted 30 November 2017 - 01:15 PM

Add my name too :)

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Posted 30 November 2017 - 02:08 PM Edited by YasirRFL King, 30 November 2017 - 02:33 PM.

Chill Roxie bro,
I have made a far plan for you and for those who are in rolls.

Well,
I will think about you Karan that where I put you!
Just Relax and wait.

And sorry Roxie bro it is not uploading on the DYOM website.
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Posted 02 December 2017 - 10:18 AM

Add me,A Secerct Agent Guy,If We Can Be Friends!

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Posted 02 December 2017 - 10:24 AM

Hehey,
You answered my question before I asked ,
You are in. So what will be your name , because AfricaDesignerDz should be curious! XD

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Posted 02 December 2017 - 06:06 PM

The name is Africa,Thx Btw

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Posted 03 December 2017 - 04:09 AM

I see, Well ........ Welcome to my MP!

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Posted 03 December 2017 - 08:36 AM

Hell Yeah!

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#29

Posted 07 December 2017 - 04:22 PM

5th Mission will be uploaded on Sunday!

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Posted 12 December 2017 - 04:32 PM

UPDATE
The MP has realesed
New Characters added

Plz Review and rate Thanks




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