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Posted 19 June 2014 - 07:36 PM Edited by gammoudicj, A day ago.

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Hello everyone, welcome to my new MP/Storyline. This Mission pack is about mafia wars and it's taking place in Las Venturas.

After the fail of Thug's view, I started this. It will contain around 20-30 missions with MP and SL format.

Be sure to comment and rate, mission coming soon.

 

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2013 years, Las Venturas

A young guy called Nate Madison was living a great life in a rich family. He had everything he wanted but

one day, an event happened and changed all his life. He didn't had a choice apart becoming a hitman, working

for everybody for one reason... saving his family

 

 

 

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Protagonist:

 

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Nate Madison:

A young man who born in a rich family and had everything he wanted. Also he was a pro in racing and 

almost wins in all the races that he participate in. His life changed when he got in troubles with the Duong Yakuzas and made

him become a hitman. He will do anything and work for anybody to kill Wing Duong and save his family from his

mafia.

 

Friends:

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Scott Madison:

A rich business man in Las Venturas. He owns a whole company and he is known in whole Las Venturas.

He met Milie when he was 25 and they both fell in love and later they had three children: Nate, Josh and Angel.

Scott doesn't know what his son did, but sooner or later he'll find out

 

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Milie Madison:

Scott's wife and the mother of Nate, Josh and Angel. When she was 20 years old, she met

Scott and fell in love with him. She is so nice especially with her husband. But she doesn't know about what

Nate did.

 

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Angel Madison:

Nate's sister. She is 18 years old and she has a dream to become the best model in 

Las Venturas. Also, she is very intelligent and she is the best in her class.

 

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Josh Madison:

Josh is Nate"s brother. He is 20 years old. He wants to be like his brother, a pro in racing. That's his dream.

He is a guy whith jokes, always funny and making peoplle laugh.

 

 

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Donald Jackson:

Donald is Nate's best friend and also one of his classmates and partner in racing.

He always helps Nate and treats him like a brother.

 

 

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Guo Cheng:

Guo is a member of the Cheng Family. Also he is the right hand of their boss, Lee. He saved Nate from the Yakuza,

then he found out that Nate is a real hitman. He will do anything to make him become a member of their

mafia and he is a great helper.

 

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Wu Lee Cheng:

Wu Lee also known as Lee is the leader of the Cheng crime family and the triad mafia. His mafia is having a mob war with the

Duong Yakuza. Lee know about Nate's problem with Wing and his killing skills so he'll help him to take him down in

exchange for helping him first.

 

Frank Tyler:

A professional robber, also a close friend of Guo. He needs Nate's help to do some big heists in exchange for giving him a slice from

the money and also helping him to kill Wing. Also he's known on the streets and he's a drug dealer too.

 

 

Antagonists:

 

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Wing Duong:

Wing is the leader of Duong Yakuza Crime Family. He is a serious guy that nobody f*cks with.

It's him who started the HUNT onto Nate and his family. He will do anything to take him and his family down.

 

 

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Chapter 1: The HUNT begins

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Intro

Life changing moments

Racing Time

Problems started

Running time

Revenge begining

One last step

Special meeting

Liberty madness

Chapter 2: Mafia vs. mafia

Full speed

Zero or hero?

First heist

RAMPAGE

Guardian angel

A little deal

Family reunit

Conversation and war

The hit

Unseen ambush

Chapter 3: Ending the HUNT

Take down plan

Necessary equipments

The big score

Supplie Lines

End of the start

 

 

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The Duong Yakuza:

One of the most dangerous mafias in Las Venturas, their task is to take over San Andreas. They racket everybody and kills

anyone they want. Even they sound serious, they are not like the Ronello family. They are having a mob war with 

the Cheng Triads. They are hunting down Nate too.

Status: Enemies

Danger status: Dangerous

Status of leader: Alive

 

The Cheng Triads:

One of the most dangerous mafia in Las Venturas, they own the Four Dragons casino and they are being led by Lee Cheng.

They are a peacefull mafia and they are having a mob war with the Yakuza. Even if they sound serious, they can't even stand

in the Ronello family's way.

Status: Friends

Danger status: Dangerous

Status of leader: Alive

 

 

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Coming soon...

 

Written Review:

Thanks for Revolver1 for making it.

 

 

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PatrickW and Dutchy3010 for making DYOM.

GammoudiCJ for desiging the missions.

The missions players for playing the missions.

KD Himan for making the logo for me.

AnDReJ98 for making the headers.

ProDX34 for making the trailer.

Revolver1 for making the review.


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Posted 19 June 2014 - 07:51 PM

Dude that is amazing, And also headers are cool :) Story looks interesting I'm looking forward for your missions :) Good luck Keep up with good work :^:

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Posted 19 June 2014 - 07:55 PM

Dude that is amazing, And also headers are cool :) Story looks interesting I'm looking forward for your missions :) Good luck Keep up with good work :^:

Thanks Huzaifa, first four missions are coming this weekend+screenshots.


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Posted 21 June 2014 - 05:08 AM

Ahh... can't wait when you released 3rd mission (Racing Time) which it might be my favorite theme mission, i'll wait for your incoming missions. Good luck dude  :^:


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Posted 21 June 2014 - 07:44 AM

Ahh... can't wait when you released 3rd mission (Racing Time) which it might be my favorite theme mission, i'll wait for your incoming missions. Good luck dude  :^:

Thanks man, also the release date is changed. It's gonna be today, I'll just have to remake the intro because I lost the file. Maybe around 5 hours from now. Stay tuned  :santa:


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Posted 21 June 2014 - 04:44 PM

First four missions are uploaded now, play it, rate it and give me your feedbacks guys :)

 

Intro

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Racing Time

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Posted 21 June 2014 - 09:22 PM

Sorry for double posting but didn't anybody check the missions? I know most of you think that they are boring but missions are great, somebody please play and give me some feedbacks.


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Posted 21 June 2014 - 09:53 PM

Wait some time when people take some free time to play your missions. By the way, i played first 2, and you really improved as far as i can see. They were different with variety & they are far more longer than your previous missions. I may continue through the story later. 


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Posted 21 June 2014 - 10:04 PM

Wait some time when people take some free time to play your missions. By the way, i played first 2, and you really improved as far as i can see. They were different with variety & they are far more longer than your previous missions. I may continue through the story later. 

Seriously man, the first two missions were just some introductions. The best mission is the third one and the action starts in the fourth. BTW, I'll try to upload two missions tommorow :)


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 02:56 AM Edited by Eminence E., 22 June 2014 - 06:14 AM.

I didn't have time yesterday, but I'll play the missions today when I come back from tuitions that means after 2 hours from now.
E: Okay so I played the first four missions.
The begginning of the introduction I can say was awesome, but after the awesomeness were some boring cutscenes with some dialouges that were not at all related to the story. This only consumes some precious time of the player. The cutscene placement was decent, but there were a lot of moving cutscenes and that didn't look good (to me).
The second mission was the best among all four. It untangled the story plus the idea of this specific mission was impressive. The route points on the car we follow could have been better because the car stuck at certain places. Also the ammo we recieve for the weapon was too low. The story was a little unrealistic, a perfect example - Nate being caught. I mean how did they suspect his presence on the roof?
Did you test the third mission? It is unplayable. I don't know if it's just me or someone else experienced this problem. After the race starts the player is teleported outside the car and we're told to get back in the car, but and that is not possible because some other actor is already driving it. Before I could even understand anything, the car was driven miles away.. :/
The fourth mission has problems too. While driving to the airport, we're told to make sure that they(?) are following us, actually there was not a single thing following me. I continued to the airport and after taking out all the enemies there I had to go to other locations on the map to kill some more.
Overall the story is good. :)
I'll continue playing this mission pack until it gets monotonous (I hope it doesn't). ;)

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Posted 22 June 2014 - 06:57 AM Edited by gammoudicj, 22 June 2014 - 06:59 AM.

I didn't have time yesterday, but I'll play the missions today when I come back from tuitions that means after 2 hours from now.
E: Okay so I played the first four missions.
The begginning of the introduction I can say was awesome, but after the awesomeness were some boring cutscenes with some dialouges that were not at all related to the story. This only consumes some precious time of the player. The cutscene placement was decent, but there were a lot of moving cutscenes and that didn't look good (to me).
The second mission was the best among all four. It untangled the story plus the idea of this specific mission was impressive. The route points on the car we follow could have been better because the car stuck at certain places. Also the ammo we recieve for the weapon was too low. The story was a little unrealistic, a perfect example - Nate being caught. I mean how did they suspect his presence on the roof?
Did you test the third mission? It is unplayable. I don't know if it's just me or someone else experienced this problem. After the race starts the player is teleported outside the car and we're told to get back in the car, but and that is not possible because some other actor is already driving it. Before I could even understand anything, the car was driven miles away.. :/
The fourth mission has problems too. While driving to the airport, we're told to make sure that they(?) are following us, actually there was not a single thing following me. I continued to the airport and after taking out all the enemies there I had to go to other locations on the map to kill some more.
Overall the story is good. :)
I'll continue playing this mission pack until it gets monotonous (I hope it doesn't). ;)

About the introduction, it has to be like that man, it represents the creator, the name, the version of DYOM used, etc...

Second mission, well it has to be like that too so the story could continue as planed.

THird mission, the bug that you talked about didn't happen to me. I played the mission without any problem many times because I enjoyed it.

The fourth mission, the car has 2500 health, and the enemies have just some pistols and uzis and also the player will get an AK later, there were two bikes and two cars of the mafia following you, maybe you drove too fast. Anyway, hanks for your comment and i'll retry the missions again and look for the bugs that you talked about.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 07:33 AM

About the introduction, it has to be like that man, it represents the creator, the name, the version of DYOM used, etc...
Second mission, well it has to be like that too so the story could continue as planed.
THird mission, the bug that you talked about didn't happen to me. I played the mission without any problem many times because I enjoyed it.
The fourth mission, the car has 2500 health, and the enemies have just some pistols and uzis and also the player will get an AK later, there were two bikes and two cars of the mafia following you, maybe you drove too fast. Anyway, hanks for your comment and i'll retry the missions again and look for the bugs that you talked about.

I know the introduction has to be like that, but I was referring to all that happenned after going to the burger shot. That wasn't really neccessary.
You're right about the second mission. ;)
I tried the third missions several times, but met the same fate everytime.

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Posted 22 June 2014 - 07:37 AM

 

 

About the introduction, it has to be like that man, it represents the creator, the name, the version of DYOM used, etc...
Second mission, well it has to be like that too so the story could continue as planed.
THird mission, the bug that you talked about didn't happen to me. I played the mission without any problem many times because I enjoyed it.
The fourth mission, the car has 2500 health, and the enemies have just some pistols and uzis and also the player will get an AK later, there were two bikes and two cars of the mafia following you, maybe you drove too fast. Anyway, hanks for your comment and i'll retry the missions again and look for the bugs that you talked about.

I know the introduction has to be like that, but I was referring to all that happenned after going to the burger shot. That wasn't really neccessary.
You're right about the second mission. ;)
I tried the third missions several times, but met the same fate everytime.

 

I just retried it, nothing happen man, the race was going so well, everyone in his car and driving faster. Maybe you are using some mods man. Anyway, let's wait for other people's feedback and see if they have the same problem.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 09:40 AM

I play your four mission and what I say is that Intro was awesome but when I play second mission it fails after this line "Find another way from the roof " and 3rd and 4th mission is great! Overall I gave you 4/5 Keep up the good work mate :^:

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Posted 22 June 2014 - 09:47 AM

I play your four mission and what I say is that Intro was awesome but when I play second mission it fails after this line "Find another way from the roof " and 3rd and 4th mission is great! Overall I gave you 4/5 Keep up the good work mate :^:

How did it happen to you Huzaifa? remember that you musn't kill any Mafian and your car musn't be destroyed. Annyway, thanks for the feedback. :)


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 12:59 PM

And read what i just said. You improved mission 'overall', even if it was introduction. I said it's far more longer than previous, what is true.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 01:08 PM

And read what i just said. You improved mission 'overall', even if it was introduction. I said it's far more longer than previous, what is true.

Alright, thanks for your feedback AnDReJ98, stay tuned, a mission will be uploaded today or maybe two.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 01:38 PM

Played 4 missions and what i can say is just..the missions are awesome. Keep it up 5/5  :lol: . waiting for the next missions.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 01:47 PM

Played 4 missions and what i can say is just..the missions are awesome. Keep it up 5/5  :lol: . waiting for the next missions.

Thanks for your great feedbacks, the mission is almost done but I found a bug and I'm trying to fix it. :p


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 03:28 PM

Well, I tried the third mission again. Yes, the same thing happenned but luckily I was able to pull out that actor and get back in the car.
I was truely amazed by the perfection of the mission, the best race mission I've ever played and one of the best overall.

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Posted 22 June 2014 - 03:34 PM

Well, I tried the third mission again. Yes, the same thing happenned but luckily I was able to pull out that actor and get back in the car.
I was truely amazed by the perfection of the mission, the best race mission I've ever played and one of the best overall.

Well, it isn't the best. There was 11 racers including the player, and I admit it the distance was long but you should play ProDX34 race missions, to be honest I learnt making race missions from him. Also, sorry guys the mission won't be uploaded today due to the bugs. But it's gonna be uploaded tommorow with another mission.


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Posted 22 June 2014 - 09:28 PM

Eminence is right. The same thing happens to me in the 3rd mission. But that's okay.. I like the story, i'm curios about what's next with Nate.. For me, it doesn't look now like hitman, but i hope it will change in the next missions. Good luck mate! :p

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Posted 23 June 2014 - 04:07 AM

Gammoudi waiting for next missions. Story is too interesting :)

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Posted 24 June 2014 - 04:26 PM

Eminence is right. The same thing happens to me in the 3rd mission. But that's okay.. I like the story, i'm curios about what's next with Nate.. For me, it doesn't look now like hitman, but i hope it will change in the next missions. Good luck mate! :p

You'll find out trough the story why it's called the Chronicle of a hitman.

@Huzaifa: Thanks man, I aperciate it.

Anyway, two more missions uploaded! Characters Screens added, gangs added.

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Posted 24 June 2014 - 05:34 PM

I was just playing ''Revenge begining'' .

Everything was great, but after the cutscene where the triads make the ambush, it crashes.

I replayed it and it crashed again, probably because there are too many actors.


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Posted 24 June 2014 - 05:37 PM

I was just playing ''Revenge begining'' .

Everything was great, but after the cutscene where the triads make the ambush, it crashes.

I replayed it and it crashed again, probably because there are too many actors.

That bug didn't happen to me, anyway I'll replay it again and see what will happen and if there is something, I'll fix it ASAP.:)


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Posted 26 June 2014 - 02:50 AM Edited by Eminence E., 26 June 2014 - 03:06 AM.

The missions were great. There maybe a few mistakes, but that were acceptable with the DYOM limits. Great use of slow-motion cutscenes, especially the exploding of the house and Guo jumping from the building. ;)
Individually, both missions were superb. But I'm playing this as a mission pack, and I felt you missed one vital element in these missions - Variation. Just from the second mission it has been Drive-Cutscene-Kill the Mafians-Mission Passed or something similar (The third mission was an exception). I would really like to see at least some missions which are different and one of it's kind. :^:

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Posted 26 June 2014 - 08:48 AM

The missions were great. There maybe a few mistakes, but that were acceptable with the DYOM limits. Great use of slow-motion cutscenes, especially the exploding of the house and Guo jumping from the building. ;)
Individually, both missions were superb. But I'm playing this as a mission pack, and I felt you missed one vital element in these missions - Variation. Just from the second mission it has been Drive-Cutscene-Kill the Mafians-Mission Passed or something similar (The third mission was an exception). I would really like to see at least some missions which are different and one of it's kind. :^:

Yeah, I know what you're talking about, there will be some kind missions, I won't tell you it now and also there will be heist missions, rampages, Random events and even a marathon. You just have to wait until I'm done with some other missions of my other secret project, well only ProDX34 know about it. 

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Posted 26 June 2014 - 10:18 AM

You just have to wait until I'm done with some other missions of my other secret project, well only ProDX34 know about it. 

Yeah... a secret project which is just between us who know, but you can guess what the project is...

 

Anyway... I've played every missions unless "Revenge Beginning".

What i can said is, your missions were great and perhaps it better than my TPoD, gameplay and difficulties are designed very well, objects were placed very perfectly and really fit with the mission condition, also no grammar mistakes i found yet(as i thought). Even there might be some mistakes because limitation, but honestly i really like it.

 

But there was a bit of disappointment from me, it's about 3rd mission which is my favorite theme, racing. The track is too long which make the race is very easy to win as i ever said in PM before and also seems you put the routepoints for an actor are messy, so some drivers were late for turning when in a corner (it also occurred when doing a drive-by in mission Running Time), so you need to improve it.

 

About the reason why i can't play the mission "Revenge Beginning" is :

Everything was great, but after the cutscene where the triads make the ambush, it crashes.

I replayed it and it crashed again, probably because there are too many actors.

It also happened to me, initially was very amazing but gone because of this crash. Please look out for this and fix this asap.

 

Rating : 4.5 / 5 (Rating may can be changed)

Keep up the good work, i'll be always looking forward for the next missions.  :^:

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Posted 26 June 2014 - 10:23 AM

@ProDX34, I'll try to delete some actors to fix that bug as soon as I'm done with the first mission of our secret, Action starts with 18(you know).





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