i opened this thread so you can give me feedback on the mission series i created. I am relatively new to DYOM. Have played missions before but never created missions. But then i started making some missions and yet the first 2 missions weren't perfect. The Explosions didnt work right and in mission 2 a soldier gets killed. But in mission 3 it was perfect (perfect in the meaning how it was supposed to be like).
The story is loosely based on my book "Space Galaxies: Time and Space" but with minor modifications because you can't make space Battles in GTA: San Andreas. The first part of the Story is just a little big explaining and constructing the bigger story. When the time travel starts (app. at mission 10 or 11) the real story begins.
It tells the Story of Mayor Jack Christopher, US Air Force soldier at Kensington Airbase, New York, USA. After humankind is starving because there is not enough food for all humans, Jack is send out to go on a diplomatic mission to the planet Gyrol. On the planet he gets in trouble and it looks unevitable to get back in time into the past. But is time travel really safe?
(sorted by appearance/importance)
Jack is the main character of the series and the person which you take control of. His parents were killed in a car accident and he has befriended with Pete. Jack is a Mayor in US Air Force (First Appearance: The Negotiator)
He is the grand-grandson of Paul Gumbell, Inventor of the time machine. Pete is a friend of Jack and the guy who controls the time machine when operating in 2139. Pete is also the inventor of the "Fast-Forward"-Button to get back to the Future without a second machine. Pete will accompany Jack on its later travels. Pete is Lieutenant in US Air Force. (has not appeared yet)
His Name is unknown at the beginning of the story
FBI-Agent Liane Forbes is the security guard and escort of Jack Christopher. Her Grandfather was the pilot of the moon ferry. (First Appearance: Difficulties)
Arek Tewil is the actual President of Planet Gyrol. He likes to torture and kill his people. Its rumored that his leadership is a dictatorship. (First Appearance: The Riot)
Glacias is a little ice elf living on the Planet Haraznaz.
Leyila Osmond is an orphan Jack meets in
Thomas Alva Edison invented the light bulb and the phonograph. He was born in 1847.
Imhotep served under the pharao Djoser as chancellor and high priest of the sun god Ra at Heliopolis.
Oberst Hamann is a
General Berezinov is a
She is the daughter of
Kan Kanook comes from the Planet Lothedar. He is a Volt-Car-Racer and a long-time friend of Jack. Kan is 19 years old. (not appeared yet)
Pora Vergé is the arch-enemy of Kan and he comes from the Planet Cicarthé. He is best known for cheating in Volt-Car-Races and he kills competitors that are better than him.
Chapter 1 - Prolog:
Chapter 2 - The Negotiator
Chapter 3 - Difficulties
Chapter 4 - The Riot
Some mission have and future missions will have Easter Eggs. For example you can find Big Smoke in Chapter 4.
Dutchy3010 and PatrickW - For creating DYOM
http://www.flamingtext.com- For headers
Revolver 1 - For showing me his headers he created @ Flamingtext