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Leo28
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#1

Posted 23 September 2013 - 01:59 PM Edited by Leo28, 08 December 2013 - 06:03 PM.

 Hello, people.

 

I want to show you all my newest series! L.A.W!!

(law)

 

 

History

 

 

 

You are Leo, a 25 year old man that have a  common wish: Being part of the law. He likes police better.Leo must pass by some situations to join , where there , he will create a great friendship with his partner.Join that journey and find out what will happen at L.A.W!

 

 

Characters

 

 

Leo - He is the protagonist. His wish is to be part of the law. He is 25 year old and fights for justice.

 

Sgt.Zack - He is the official tester of SFPD. He often participates to occurrences, too.

 

Officer Nilton - The partner of our protagonist. Nilton has a ''funny'' personality , but can also be serious when needed.

 

Police Chief  - He is the commander of SFPD. A very powerful man, and also the boss of Leo.

 

Woozie - Woozie is in the history. Triads are evolved with Foster Valley situation.

 

(More characters will appear with the advance of the episodes)

 

 

 

 

Episodes

 

 

L.A.W - Episode 1 (A Lawful Person)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/28081 - 

L.A.W - Episode 2 (San Fierro Law Event)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/28092

 

L.A.W - Episode 3 (First Day)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/28108

 

L.A.W - Episode 4 (Foster Valley Situation)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/28124

 

L.A.W - Episode 5 (Thje other side of the Coin)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/29151

 

 

Extra

 

 

 

Please, rate and comment the missions , and also  talk about the good points and negative points, just don't be rude, please. All the feedback is important for a designer, so please contribute.


Revolver1
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Posted 23 September 2013 - 02:21 PM

New designer? Awesome, I always wanted to see new faces.

I will play this as soon as possible and give you some feedbacks.

 

 All the feedback is important for a designer, so please contribute.

Well said indeed.


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Posted 23 September 2013 - 03:16 PM

New Designer, GOOD!

 

How did you know DYOM, And GTAForums?


Leo28
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Posted 23 September 2013 - 08:58 PM

New Designer, GOOD!

 

How did you know DYOM, And GTAForums?

I know DYOM since 2011, however i had problems with install and, trust me , i've been wanting to play DYOM for 2 years. Yes. 2 years. I am very happy since the day it loaded completely and i said.. .. .... .....'' OHH MY GOSH! It worked!!'' Now i pretend to increase my design skills. ( I know a lot of things, but all help are welcome )


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Posted 27 September 2013 - 10:15 AM Edited by Revolver1, 27 September 2013 - 10:16 AM.

Ok I've played this, here are my feedbacks:

 

1. The story somehow seems... unrealistically. I m

Spoiler
If you know what I mean. But hey, it's DYOM, let your imagination runs free.

2.

Spoiler

3. Fine grammar, not the best but fine.

4. Again, unrealistically.

Spoiler

5. Entertaining and exciting gameplay.

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6. Good use of actors and vehicles. You indeed put some effort in this (I was about to say a lot but that would be quite exxagerating). Actors and vehicles are very well placed. And oh, objects too.

 

Those are some of my feedbacks. Take it into consideration and make your future missions better, looking forward to this.

P.S:

Spoiler


Leo28
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Posted 27 September 2013 - 11:15 AM

Ok I've played this, here are my feedbacks:

 

1. The story somehow seems... unrealistically. I m

Spoiler
If you know what I mean. But hey, it's DYOM, let your imagination runs free.

2.

Spoiler

3. Fine grammar, not the best but fine.

4. Again, unrealistically.

Spoiler

5. Entertaining and exciting gameplay.

Spoiler

6. Good use of actors and vehicles. You indeed put some effort in this (I was about to say a lot but that would be quite exxagerating). Actors and vehicles are very well placed. And oh, objects too.

 

Those are some of my feedbacks. Take it into consideration and make your future missions better, looking forward to this.

P.S:

Spoiler

Thanks! Well, i wanted to make the game shorter because it would take too long until the protagonist became a cop, and it wouldn't have much action. So i skipped the rest and tried to be criative. But i am happy you played. I'll try to improve things.As for the ''Are we able to kill?'', i wanted to show people they were still novice, you know? :D BTW thanks a lot for feedbacking! I'll be posting new episodes soon.


Revolver1
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#7

Posted 03 October 2013 - 03:03 PM

If you want I can review this.


Leo28
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#8

Posted 04 October 2013 - 11:50 AM

If you want I can review this.

Of course i want! :D but i want to finish at least one chapter..


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#9

Posted 04 October 2013 - 12:07 PM

Ok 'den, I wait til you finish a chapter.

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Posted 07 October 2013 - 10:01 AM

lol dyom is boring now since the old guys left


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Posted 09 October 2013 - 09:49 AM

lol dyom is boring now since the old guys left

What do you mean old guys? You weren't even here to experience the old guys.
Maybe if you gave the new guys a chance you can experience the same amount of fun you had playing old missions.

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Posted 09 October 2013 - 04:33 PM

 

lol dyom is boring now since the old guys left

What do you mean old guys? You weren't even here to experience the old guys.
Maybe if you gave the new guys a chance you can experience the same amount of fun you had playing old missions.

 

i was here long before u were using different accs first being Pvt Hunk





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