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#31

Posted 16 September 2013 - 12:38 PM

Holy! Sh*t,

Abeer planned to rob bank.

I liked to play Mission#4 Very Much because Mission#4 Story is like a incident that happened in my Life in January 2013.

 

Now I can say that Lost Love is Full Of Twist and Turns!

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Posted 16 September 2013 - 04:38 PM

Predicting a girl’s brain is like holding two watermelons with one hand

@Viscosity: I noticed one mistake. As you said above that “Abeer” never insulated that he like that girl but in the mission you showed that, he tries to talk to her but she avoid him and said she is not interested in him???

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One more thing, from where do you come up with these mission names?

Valued when Vanished? When I saw this with that image I thought you made me a Holy Being.

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"I was valued after I vanished"

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#33

Posted 16 September 2013 - 05:08 PM

Holy! Sh*t,

Abeer planned to rob bank.

I liked to play Mission#4 Very Much because Mission#4 Story is like a incident that happened in my Life in January 2013.

 

Now I can say that Lost Love is Full Of Twist and Turns!

You could use [spoiler*] [/spoiler*] tags, because after reading your post I already know what will happen and don't feel like playing it.


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#34

Posted 17 September 2013 - 05:01 AM

Syndrome@Oh come on Lucas please play, I used your name for the first time as bank manager in this mission.

I want to know your feedback ok please.

Next mission will be out soon.


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Posted 17 September 2013 - 05:24 AM

Hey can you use my name too? It's Ky, and put me in some Asian dude skin, cause im Asian :D


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Posted 17 September 2013 - 06:02 AM Edited by Viscosity, 17 September 2013 - 06:25 AM.

@Revolver: If only you have told me earlier. I already name the gun dealer. I'll see if I plan to bring any new character in future.

@Abeer: See everyone wants to be in this story, Be thankful I chose you as main character. And The mistake you noticed isn't a mistake, I did it on purpose

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Posted 17 September 2013 - 02:56 PM

Hehehe Mr. Lukas (me gusta). However, it crashed for me after Abeer got in the taxi, I don't know why, probably because of my computer.

I don't like, that there is too much cutsenes and no gameplay, but I like how the story goes........

Improve your grammar and good luck on future missions.

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Posted 17 September 2013 - 05:35 PM Edited by Viscosity, 17 September 2013 - 05:43 PM.

New mission uploaded.

This is my first action mission so I really need everyone's feedback about it.

@thegtaman: You have to play this, your the main hero in this one. Special request to you for your feedback.

@Symdrome: There was a little gameplay after the taxi part

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"me gusta" you have to tell me what does that mean.

 

Hint: Head shot will be the best way to kill in this mission

 

What do you think will happen next (Quiz for those who played only)

1. Will Abeer drop the heist plan and go back to his home.

2. He will continue with his plan to rob the bank.

3. He will become a weapon dealer.

4. He will be caught by the cops. 


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Posted 17 September 2013 - 06:01 PM

New mission uploaded.

This is my first action mission so I really need everyone's feedback about it.

@thegtaman: You have to play this, your the main hero in this one. Special request to you for your feedback.

@Symdrome: There was a little gameplay after the taxi part

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"me gusta" you have to tell me what does that mean.

 

Hint: Head shot will be the best way to kill in this mission

 

What do you think will happen next (Quiz for those who played only)

1. Will Abeer drop the heist plan and go back to his home.

2. He will continue with his plan to rob the bank.

3. He will become a weapon dealer.

4. He will be caught by the cops. 

 

2. He will continue his plan to rob the bank.

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And "me gusta" means "I like".


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Posted 18 September 2013 - 05:44 AM

What do you think will happen next (Quiz for those who played only)

1. Will Abeer drop the heist plan and go back to his home.

2. He will continue with his plan to rob the bank.

3. He will become a weapon dealer.

4. He will be caught by the cops. 

 

I think:-

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You are a Creative designer. I never thought that a girl can made mission like this.

As this is your first Action mission and I didn't notice any mistake.

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Posted 18 September 2013 - 07:32 AM

 I never thought that a girl can made mission like this.

And I thought you were one of those person who wouldn't differentiate people on basics of gender but I was wrong, boy will always be boys.

@Syndrome: Nice guess, me gusta, there will be involvement of that girls father in future missions.

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Posted 18 September 2013 - 07:40 AM

 

 I never thought that a girl can made mission like this.

And I thought you were one of those person who wouldn't differentiate people on basics of gender but I was wrong, boy will always be boys.

@Syndrome: Nice guess, me gusta, there will be involvement of that girls father in future missions.

 

 

I have a another friend on GTA Forum Rosalina but she is not interested in Mission making. :barf:

I am not differentiate you according to your gender but I never meet a girl like you. You are Awesome+Cool :beerhat:  

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Posted 18 September 2013 - 08:20 AM Edited by Viscosity, 18 September 2013 - 11:57 AM.

Awesome+Cool, Thanks. Seems like you only want to make girls, friends. 

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You can always say no and pretend that you don't know what I mean.

 

Edit: Does any of you know how to make trailer and make one for me? 

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Posted 18 September 2013 - 02:34 PM

Awesome+Cool, Thanks. Seems like you only want to make girls, friends. 

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You can always say no and pretend that you don't know what I mean.

 

Edit: Does any of you know how to make trailer and make one for me? 

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 Yes, I want to make girls as my friends because

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You can request Trailer for mission in Trailer topic.

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Posted 18 September 2013 - 03:23 PM

You can request Trailer for mission in Trailer topic.

 

I saw the trailer topic, no one is responding to it. Its inactive. 


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Posted 18 September 2013 - 04:38 PM

Yep, most of DYOM'ers are playing GTA V. Even the Designer Lounge is inactive.
T13 can make some good trailer, try to PM him, I saw him in GTA V section. Or THBP

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Posted 20 September 2013 - 07:45 AM Edited by Viscosity, 20 September 2013 - 07:48 AM.

Mission 6 uploaded, please play and give feedback.

@Revolver: I am using your name too in this mission, but I can't add you to starring list as have remake the list all over again.

 

Next mission is one of the big event of story i.e The Bank Robbery, please share any ideas you have or suggest any robbery mission made on dyom by other designers so I can get an idea from it. I want it to be one of the best mission on dyom so I need all of your support.

I've heard there are many robbery missions in GTA V. It would be nice if anyone share a nice robbery idea from it, you can pm me if you want to.


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Posted 20 September 2013 - 09:52 AM

Mission 6 uploaded, please play and give feedback.

@Revolver: I am using your name too in this mission, but I can't add you to starring list as have remake the list all over again.

 

Next mission is one of the big event of story i.e The Bank Robbery, please share any ideas you have or suggest any robbery mission made on dyom by other designers so I can get an idea from it. I want it to be one of the best mission on dyom so I need all of your support.

I've heard there are many robbery missions in GTA V. It would be nice if anyone share a nice robbery idea from it, you can pm me if you want to.

Well I played it and I don't see my name lol

Anyway, I played chapter 2. Must say it's quite fine. But I must say something, Abeer is a COLLEGE student, not a gunner. He can't possibly hold a Pistol, not to mention AKs or M4s or sh*t you are going to use. So, don't rush straight into the bank job yet, make some training missions for Abeer, probably finding some partners, etc. 


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Posted 20 September 2013 - 11:45 AM Edited by Viscosity, 20 September 2013 - 11:46 AM.

Well I played it and I don't see my name lol

Anyway, I played chapter 2. Must say it's quite fine. But I must say something, Abeer is a COLLEGE student, not a gunner. He can't possibly hold a Pistol, not to mention AKs or M4s or sh*t you are going to use. So, don't rush straight into the bank job yet, make some training missions for Abeer, probably finding some partners, etc. 

 

 

Thanks for reply, Sorry I made a mistake, your character would appear in next mission for first time, (i.e the robbery one) and may appear later on too, you'll play as a Asian tycoon who owns a club or a casino or a hotel (not decided yet) in Las Ventures.

 

And your right, since I am making a realistic story, I can't just let him walk in the bank like that, I'll think of some training or something like that. But he won't need partners nor can he afford to have one. See the robbery is very tricky, no one will know that there has been a robbery before players leaves the bank, but as I have to entertain players too so there will be some gunfight and police chase. And I’m also planning a great escape. Wish me luck


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Posted 20 September 2013 - 12:20 PM

 

Well I played it and I don't see my name lol

Anyway, I played chapter 2. Must say it's quite fine. But I must say something, Abeer is a COLLEGE student, not a gunner. He can't possibly hold a Pistol, not to mention AKs or M4s or sh*t you are going to use. So, don't rush straight into the bank job yet, make some training missions for Abeer, probably finding some partners, etc. 

 

 

Thanks for reply, Sorry I made a mistake, your character would appear in next mission for first time, (i.e the robbery one) and may appear later on too, you'll play as a Asian tycoon who owns a club or a casino or a hotel (not decided yet) in Las Ventures.

 

And your right, since I am making a realistic story, I can't just let him walk in the bank like that, I'll think of some training or something like that. But he won't need partners nor can he afford to have one. See the robbery is very tricky, no one will know that there has been a robbery before players leaves the bank, but as I have to entertain players too so there will be some gunfight and police chase. And I’m also planning a great escape. Wish me luck

 

Good luck, just don't make them out of hands. Remember, your main character is a COLLEGE student, so remember a student's limits, and do not break them. For example, a college student would not shoot down a helicopter with a RPG, etc.


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Posted 22 September 2013 - 06:41 AM

Hi Viscosity I was wondering if your story is written before designing the missions. I really like the theme that you've chosen to design your mission pack. I'm wondering if the missions will be longer and more detailed as with the use of objects and supporting actors. 

 

Some things that stuck out to me was the dialog and grammar. The character's dialog runs right next to the other characters instead of using +y+Abeer+w+: I love this missionpack. +n++p+Viscosity+w+: You better! This way, its clear to read what each character is saying.The grammar mistakes are minor but distracting (to me atleast). I would like to see this become one of the best mission packs we have, but I'd also like to see you grow into an even better designer. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story and future projects!


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Posted 22 September 2013 - 07:51 AM Edited by Viscosity, 22 September 2013 - 08:10 AM.

@Platinum Card: Hi, how are you. Yeah I planned the story before designing the mission. At first, I was just planning it to be simple love story with no action, but it seems that the story changed a lot from what I planned when I started designing it. New idea were added and some old one's were removed, some action was / will be  added, but the theme (main content which I want to deliver) will remain the same. And yeah it will be longer like 4 ch or more no idea at all but it will not end until my message will be delivered and don't forget that its a love story. Some new character are yet to be introduce + every one in the starring list (or they'll kill me), There will be a supporting actor later on in the story.

Sorry about the grammar, everyone is complaining about it.

And above all Thanks, I am very much surprised how every one is showing the interest support and affection in this story. Thank you

 

Everyone is free to see this spoiler except Abeer

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#53

Posted 23 September 2013 - 05:35 AM

Sorry to go off topic

There is something freakishly strange about this mission pack and stranger about you. Do you know me personally? Sorry it’s just weird that your mission packs Abeer description is...identical

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Looking forward for your next mission and reply.


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Posted 23 September 2013 - 07:33 AM Edited by Viscosity, 23 September 2013 - 01:54 PM.


Looking forward for your next mission and reply.

Thank you very much :inlove:

Sorry to go off topic

There is something freakishly strange about this mission pack and stranger about you. Do you know me personally? Sorry it’s just weird that your mission packs Abeer description is...identical

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Edit:

New mission uploaded

link:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/28107

Sorry but this mission will be in two parts.

First it was all going to happen in one mission but when I was done preparing the whole mission, it crashed :panic:

So this is the part till which It works and doesn't crash. I will have to remake the other half all over again :cry:

mood:-( Miserable


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Posted 23 September 2013 - 04:59 PM Edited by Abeer, 23 September 2013 - 05:00 PM.

IGNORED? You could say yes or no or maybe but NOOOOO you say thank you and ignored? You know you are getting on my nerves. And LOL it crashed.

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Posted 24 September 2013 - 04:05 AM

IGNORED? You could say yes or no or maybe but NOOOOO you say thank you and ignored? You know you are getting on my nerves. And LOL it crashed.

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@Abeer : What is the size of your 

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. I need it for my next mission. PM me if you are shy to tell here :whistle: 

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#57

Posted 24 September 2013 - 05:43 AM

How the hell is my x size related to your robbery mission? What will you do, make Abeer shoot through his x? First off I am pissed enough that you are using my name in you MP, although it’s a nice story and all but then you start asking size? Your impossible :sneaky:


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Posted 24 September 2013 - 08:46 AM Edited by Viscosity, 24 September 2013 - 08:53 AM.

Just Cause part 2 is uploaded, its my best action and fun mission till yet so please play and let me know how is it and how are you liking the story so far.

Ky character appears at the ending part also LnD and Doublepluse names are used as security guards (hope they won't be mad) and Trent and Lukas character roles are finished, they won't appear in future missions. Chapter 2 is now completed.

 

@Abeer: Sorry I forgot that you don't have it so how can you tell me its size :^:. I'll use some random figure, sorry to anger you miss. :catloaf:

 

Its time for Quiz, lets see who is smart enough to predict what will happen next.

1. Abeer will go back home to his parents.

2. He will decide not to go back home and start a new life.

3. He will give all the money in charity as he is feeling bad for what he has done.

4. He will plan to rob another place, this time something bigger. 

5. Police will catch him or he will surrender himself to the police.

6. He will join a gang or some Mafia.


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#59

Posted 25 September 2013 - 06:05 AM

I played Just cause pt1 and 2.

Both are awesome................

and I think now its time for a

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Now Its the Time of

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Posted 25 September 2013 - 06:07 AM

Its time for Quiz, lets see who is smart enough to predict what will happen next.

 

2. He will decide not to go back home and start a new life.

                           OR

6. He will join a gang or some Mafia.

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