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#1

Posted 01 September 2013 - 01:16 PM Edited by The Odyssey, 25 March 2014 - 09:20 AM.

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What do you do, when you are one of the few that is aware?

 

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In a future where everything seems near-perfect - there is only one flaw - life ends at 40.
In this future there is a location you go where you pass on called the Passing House, once you reach 40. The government has brainwashed the people to convince them that their time is up and they must go to the Passing House. This is the governments sick way of handling population. Scott Maddison has recently reached 40, and he is unaffected by the governments brainwashing method. Scott must join those who are also immune, and bring down Operation Z.
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Character Name Character Description Scott Maddison The protagonist of the MP. He is smart, wise and brave, and one of the few who is aware of the governments evil plans. His plans are to bring down Operation Z. Kenny Woodland Scotts friend he met at a gun shop that he paid to escort him to his hideout. He is stubborn and demands attention. Travis Laine A man Scott spotted that was about to be killed by the government. He is a giant, but gentle man. He protects his wife at all costs. Becca Laine Travis' wife. She relies on her husband to protect her and can be quiet, but aggressive. Jerry Barnes A criminal that has forced Scott to let him stay at his hideout in order to hide from authorities. He is constantly paranoid.

Edit: Due to the update, tableb does not work. Table should be fixed soon.

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Chapter 1 - The Escapees
An introduction to the end - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27646
Risking the risks- http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27669
A couple more - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27691
Small town stealth - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27709

The rotten apple in the fruit bowl - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27749

New home - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27761

Thickened proof - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27834

Just one request - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27906

 

 

WinRAR file with all missions of chapter 1 - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27907

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Posted 01 September 2013 - 01:24 PM

Amazing! Although the thread needs more info but i'm gonna play the mission right now.

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Posted 01 September 2013 - 01:31 PM

Looks awesome. It needs more information though. I will try it out once im finished with my mission.
P.S: When I become an adult and if I work for the goverment, I will use this way to control the population =))

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Posted 01 September 2013 - 01:40 PM Edited by Target13, 01 September 2013 - 01:59 PM.

And i will find a way to kill you smile.gif

EDIT: Feedback given.

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Posted 01 September 2013 - 02:12 PM

Thank you both. New information and missions will be coming very soon.

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Posted 01 September 2013 - 02:21 PM

Awesome i think mission will have more bigger btw awesome concept of story biggrin.gif smile.gif

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Posted 02 September 2013 - 11:45 AM

@KingFX Thanks. I'm planning for this to be a long story.
New mission released!
http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27669
Make sure you rate and give me some feedback biggrin.gif

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Posted 02 September 2013 - 12:48 PM

downloading now

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Posted 03 September 2013 - 12:07 PM

New mission released!
http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27691
Play, rate, and don't forget to give me some feedback. smile.gif

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Posted 03 September 2013 - 12:54 PM

Nice topic. I'll play this today and post some feedback.

Good luck! icon14.gif

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Posted 03 September 2013 - 01:00 PM

QUOTE (Alex5526 @ Tuesday, Sep 3 2013, 12:54)
Nice topic. I'll play this today and post some feedback.

Good luck! icon14.gif

Thanks, looking foward to your feedback. smile.gif

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Posted 03 September 2013 - 06:47 PM

I have created a gameplay video with audio commentary, Can I upload it?

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 07:59 AM

QUOTE (Spider262 @ Tuesday, Sep 3 2013, 18:47)
I have created a gameplay video with audio commentary, Can I upload it?

Sure smile.gif

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 01:36 PM Edited by Alex5526, 04 September 2013 - 01:41 PM.

I played the first 3 missions.

The missions are good, but I don't understand why you made them so short. I mean, you can put the mission 2 and 3 in one. Why don't you add more details to the story and make the missions a bit longer?
Also, just a little advice, turn off the peds and cars sometimes. In the mission 3, when I have to kill the agents and save Travis and Becca, the peds got scared because of the shooting, and they messed up the final cutscene.

With that being said, I have to say that the missions are better than I expected. I liked the 3 of them.
I'll be waiting for future missions. Keep up!

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 01:55 PM

Thanks for the feedback. I was thinking of joining mission 2 and 3, but I couldn't think of another mission to fill in for chapter 1, so I split them.
Also you posted that just in time because I just released a new mission.
http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27709
Make sure to rate and give feedback, guys.

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 03:03 PM

Mission 4 is really good, I have made the gameplay video, coming soon
I will also make a review on the mission like Aznkie but, I will not write it, I will say it with some parts of the gameplay videos, I will also, Create a trailer when you finish

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 05:37 PM

All of reviews made by me: https://www.youtube....tT6Zvm3UbnyES69

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Posted 04 September 2013 - 06:00 PM

@Spider

A Tutorial has been sent via PM on how to EDIT Posts.

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Posted 06 September 2013 - 09:56 AM

 

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What do you do, when you are one of the few that is aware?
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This is my new Mp that is based in a utopian future. It is inspired off Logans Run and Jimmy_Leppards storylines. Plot details below.
In a future where everything seems near-perfect - there is only one flaw - life ends at 40.
In this future there is a location you go where you pass on called the Passing House, once you reach 40. The government has brainwashed the people to convince them that their time is up and they must go to the Passing House. This is the governments sick way of handling population. Scott Maddison has recently reached 40, and he is unaffected by the governments brainwashing method. Scott must join those who are also immune, and bring down Operation Z.
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Character Name Character Description Scott Maddison The protagonist of the MP. He is smart, wise and brave, and one of the few who is aware of the governments evil plans. His plans are to bring down Operation Z. Kenny Woodland Scotts friend he met at a gun shop that he paid to escort him to his hideout. He is stubborn and demands attention. Travis Laine A man Scott spotted that was about to be killed by the government. He is a giant, but gentle man. He protects his wife at all costs. Becca Laine Travis' wife. She relies on her husband to protect her and can be quiet, but aggressive. Jerry Barnes A criminal that has forced Scott to let him stay at his hideout in order to hide from authorities. He is constantly paranoid. ajQF0Mt.png
Chapter 1 - The Escapees
An introduction to the end - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27646
Risking the risks- http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27669
A couple more http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27691
Small town stealth http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27709

 

 

Where is the fifth mission or you finished or Cancelled or what?


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Posted 06 September 2013 - 10:16 AM

What? Lol, just because I haven't made a mission in the past day doesn't mean it's cancelled, I'm just busy. A new mission should be up soon.


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Posted 06 September 2013 - 11:28 AM

What? Lol, just because I haven't made a mission in the past day doesn't mean it's cancelled, I'm just busy. A new mission should be up soon.

 

Did you see the previous missions videos? Are they good? Are they bad? What to improve?

 

Note that during yesterday, I did not do videos to create a new intro and outro and watched some Windows Movie Maker tutroials, The new videos will be better


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Posted 06 September 2013 - 12:18 PM

I think your commentaries are fine. Just post them in the Video Review topic.

New mission released.

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27749

Make sure you rate, play and give feedback. :)


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Posted 07 September 2013 - 01:13 AM

Man... your stories are AWESOME!

I really love this one, i think it's better from now than Snakes MC :333

Keep it up


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Posted 07 September 2013 - 01:18 AM

Cheers. :)
I just realised that the bloody table screwed up because the new forum doesn't have tableb. Hopefully it will get fixed soon.

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Posted 07 September 2013 - 07:26 AM

New mission released!

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27761

Make sure you rate, play and give me feedback,as always. Cheers.


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Posted 09 September 2013 - 09:32 AM

New mission released.

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27834

Make sure you rate play and give feedback :)


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Posted 12 September 2013 - 12:34 PM

Final mission of chapter 1 is out! http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27906

Also I've uploaded a WinRAR file with all the missions from Chapter 1, so you guys can play all the missions at once.

Please give feedback on the first chapter and rate it, thanks. :)

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/27907


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Posted 12 September 2013 - 04:17 PM

Finally, you have done a chapter. I have some time to spare so I guess I can delay my MP a bit and play this.
P.S You dropped The Perished Snakes?

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#29

Posted 13 September 2013 - 07:57 AM

Ok I've played this, and here are some feedbacks for you:

Pros:

1. Very good cutscenes. Perfect dialogues (I haven't found any grammar mistake nor a typo)

2. Good routes for actors. The way you made them go from this place to this place is awesome, 

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3. Nice plot

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Cons:

1. No colors in dialogues. Sometimes it could be irritating (it did irritate my eyes)

2. Not much action (But I bet some are coming soon right?)

Tips:

1. Put colors in characters' name in dialogues. It could be frustating, but it pays well (at least that's what I think)

2. More objects in gunfights for cover.

 

Overall, it was an entertaining MP. It wasn't the best but it was good. Keep it up.


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Posted 14 September 2013 - 02:28 AM

Played all mission,
Here my feedback
STORY:- Story is very intresting and good I got so fun in playing mission and got so many surprises in the story And also this story concept is also cool. simply fill with suspense and surprises your MP is really awesome.


Gameplay:- About gameplay isn't much in first chapter. but I wish more gameplay in second chapter but in the 7 th mission racing concept is really good. also in the last one its very creavitive choose of weather then it will very hard to snipe out agents.


Cutscene:- About cutscene in your MP cutscene is good and one thing your grammer is very good I don't see any mistakes in the grammer.



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