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Posted 18 July 2013 - 01:10 PM

I suck at producing, always thought there was some money to be made in the hip hop industry. I am a pretty decent ameture writer, but i cant produce the beats. i have never rapped before, i dont know if i can or cant but if i had some recording stuff i would try. anyways, if anyone has some dope beats and need some lyrics (yes, lyrics, not anything like niki/2chinz/retards) pm me the subject topic, link 2 the beats, whatever. It would be awesome to be in a posse or something.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 03:02 PM

Sounds like you really don't know a lot about rap. Chances are if you're only starting now you're going to suck, big time. All the biggest rappers have been doing it since they were young. You could have the best lyrics written for you and have no flow whatsoever and nobody will care about your lyrics.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 03:22 PM

is fourteen not early enough?

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 04:01 PM

I don't agree with Adam_.

It doesn't matter when you start. I believe you either got it, or you don't got it.

You should post like a few bars or something & I'll tell you what I think.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 04:25 PM

QUOTE (ndcorn @ Thursday, Jul 18 2013, 15:22)
is fourteen not early enough?

Oh that's early enough. But you'll probably not be very good until you have been at it for atleast a few years. For example Jay-Z had been rapping since the late 80s but only got big in 1996, so he'd been at it for about 8 years. Your lyrics are probably decent, but rapping is like, really hard.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 04:40 PM

a couple weeks ago, i found my copy of a day at the races intrumental, decided subject matter would be grand theft auto. note that this was written on an ipad so i cant cpy paste:

I just woke up at a hospital,
Spawned outside, didnt know it was possible
Saw a bashee, didnt hesitate to jack it
Hit a couple cars, wasnt even gonna look back
Saw a red light, hit the pole, car about to blow up
like fireworks, everybody show up
throw up after eating ten pizzas
hos in my car like "hi its nice to meet ya"
suspension rocks while my friends rick-roll
Driving too fast and didnt even pay the toll
cops on my ass while im trying to shake em
oopsie run over mother_______ hatin'

it needs some work, but there is more, but it needs more work than this

it sounds over 9000 times better with the jurrasic five day at the races instrumental behind it

i know it will take a while untill i find anything even close to success, even with putting in lots of hard work.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 04:50 PM

QUOTE (ndcorn @ Thursday, Jul 18 2013, 16:40)
a couple weeks ago, i found my copy of a day at the races intrumental, decided subject matter would be grand theft auto. note that this was written on an ipad so i cant cpy paste:

I just woke up at a hospital,
Spawned outside, didnt know it was possible
Saw a bashee, didnt hesitate to jack it
Hit a couple cars, wasnt even gonna look back
Saw a red light, hit the pole, car about to blow up
like fireworks, everybody show up
throw up after eating ten pizzas
hos in my car like "hi its nice to meet ya"
suspension rocks while my friends rick-roll
Driving too fast and didnt even pay the toll
cops on my ass while im trying to shake em
oopsie run over mother_______ hatin'

it needs some work, but there is more, but it needs more work than this

it sounds over 9000 times better with the jurrasic five day at the races instrumental behind it

i know it will take a while untill i find anything even close to success, even with putting in lots of hard work.

pretty good, yeah. although instead of "saw a red light, hit the pole, car about to blow up", i'd put "hit the pole, my whip roll, car about to blow up". use of slang can really help as far as rhyming goes

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 04:54 PM

you have a good point, i need to make a list of all the words that wouldnt normally come out of my mouth that i need to put in my raps. didnt ever think of using the word whip until you poited that out, its good though.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 05:00 PM

QUOTE (ndcorn @ Thursday, Jul 18 2013, 16:40)
a couple weeks ago, i found my copy of a day at the races intrumental, decided subject matter would be grand theft auto. note that this was written on an ipad so i cant cpy paste:

I just woke up at a hospital,
Spawned outside, didnt know it was possible
Saw a bashee, didnt hesitate to jack it
Hit a couple cars, wasnt even gonna look back
Saw a red light, hit the pole, car about to blow up
like fireworks, everybody show up
throw up after eating ten pizzas
hos in my car like "hi its nice to meet ya"
suspension rocks while my friends rick-roll
Driving too fast and didnt even pay the toll
cops on my ass while im trying to shake em
oopsie run over mother_______ hatin'

it needs some work, but there is more, but it needs more work than this

it sounds over 9000 times better with the jurrasic five day at the races instrumental behind it

i know it will take a while untill i find anything even close to success, even with putting in lots of hard work.

What I'd recommend to improve is:

More alliteration.
More internal rhymes.

& also work on your flow.
Obviously I can't hear the flow through text so I can't criticize too much, but from looking at it the flow is kind of elementary.
That's where internal rhymes, alliteration, & focusing on the syllables of the words will help.

Not too bad though, just keep writing and you'll always get better.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 05:20 PM

did you hear the instrumental? the flow may be simple, but it compliments the song, just listen to it:


I usually try to "become" someone with my new raps, but i cant remeber who i was thinking of when i started, i think it kind of killed my flow compared to how imagined it two weeks ago. i try to imagine myself as others for practice, and like i said, i havent recorded anything yet, but when i do i will find my own style in depth.

on another note, i am writing another song called origional shot caller, and you would think that chingy wrote that track himself.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 05:22 PM

QUOTE (ndcorn @ Thursday, Jul 18 2013, 17:20)
did you hear the instrumental? the flow may be simple, but it compliments the song, just listen to it:


I usually try to "become" someone with my new raps, but i cant remeber who i was thinking of when i started, i think it kind of killed my flow compared to how imagined it two weeks ago. i try to imagine myself as others for practice, and like i said, i havent recorded anything yet, but when i do i will find my own style in depth.

on another note, i am writing another song called origional shot caller, and you would think that chingy wrote that track himself.

Lol Chingy is trash....

But that's cool, you're saying you try to rap from the perspective of a character??
If that's what you mean, I do the same thing. (Kind of.)

And yes I heard that beat from THUG a long time ago, good song, good beat.

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 05:30 PM

lol, i know what you mean. I have probably written about seven songs halfway through, but i delete a good portion of the ones i have because:
A. It doesnt sound good with the instrumental
B. The song loses foucus
C. my raps dont flow as fast as they should to sound right
D. One instance that was based on a true experience turned cheezy when i wrote it (it was like boyz in the hood but it took way too long to get the point across and the corus sucked)
E. The corus is junk

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 06:03 PM

You don't need to have a chorus, though

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Posted 18 July 2013 - 06:42 PM

QUOTE (Adam_ @ Thursday, Jul 18 2013, 18:03)
You don't need to have a chorus, though

Yeah, I wouldn't worry about chorus' until you're happy with your verses.

For now I'd focus on improving your subject matter & the other stuff I noted above ^.




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