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Posted 24 July 2012 - 08:27 PM Edited by Jimmy_Leppard, 01 September 2013 - 03:13 PM.

Mission series status: Finished

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Hi, guys. This mission series is called ''Swiping Kings''. It's finished and it consists of 6 missions. All my missions are connected to each other, so I suggest you play them by order which you are able to follow in this topic.

Theme song:

Summary:

Zack O'Conner is one of the elite drivers and thiefs. He has been living in San Fierro for the past 2 years, staying under the police radar and living an honest life. After 2 years of living a poor, but normal life, Zack gets visited by his old friend and partner from the days when he was on the ''other side of the law'', John Skyler. John gives him a very interesting offer which Zack couldn't refuse. The offer to do a one last job with him and disappear forever, away from the cops and trouble.

Characters:

Character NameCharacter Description
Zack O'Conner
The protagonist/playable character. He is an expert thief and an amazing street racer. He's been living a normal, but a poor life for 2 years. He lives in San Fierro. He's not afraid of anything or anyone.
John Skyler
He's Zack's old friend and partner from the days when Zack was in thief business. He hasn't seen Zack for over 2 years. He's an amazing street racer and an expert thief, also a professional criminal who escaped prison once. He's not afraid of anything or anyone.
Jason Adams
He is John's old friend and a former partner on some previous jobs they did together. He's a great street racer, a cool guy who knows their way with things such as forensics.
Lucas Nate
He's very good with explosives. He likes to demolish and blow things up. He and Scott are very good friends.
Scott Peterson
He's very good with explosives. He likes to demolish and blow things up. He and Lucas are very good friends.
Trey Crome
Zack's very good friend. They have known each other since elementary school. They also did a lot of jobs alone together back in Vice City. He's a very good street racer and a pretty tough guy who likes women and party.
Donny Sanders
John's friend. An excelent shooter. He's not afraid to get into fight.
Chris West
Zack's old friend from Las Venturas. He's an electronics expert and a hacker who also organizes racing events around Las Venturas.
Charles Luther
He's the owner of Los Santos and a criminal. He runs the drug business there now. He has huge influence in the local police. He's also very rich.
Howard Loom
He's the FBI special agent from Liberty City who hunted Zack and John in Liberty City and managed to catch John who later escaped during prisoner transport. He's badass and will do anything to bring a con to justice.
Diane Hart
She's the local cop from Los Santos who gets called by Howard Loom to join her in the hunt of Zack, John and the rest of their team. She's been in the force for only a couple of weeks.

Mission list:

Chapter 1: Los Santos operations

ZIP file- http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/21093

1.) Introduction - http://dyom.gtagames...t=show&id=20160
2.) Charles Luther - http://dyom.gtagames...t=show&id=20175
3.) Complications - http://dyom.gtagames...t=show&id=20195
4.) Finish line - http://dyom.gtagames...t=show&id=20224
5.) The unexpected ambush - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/21056
6.) Pull in, pull out - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/21092


Link to the Prequel of this mission series is HERE --> http://www.gtaforums...howtopic=539185
Link to the Sequel of this mission series is HERE --> http://www.gtaforums...howtopic=558719

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 01:37 AM

Good luck, Jimmy. I don't have my PC right now to play the intro but I'll play it soon. smile.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 02:33 AM

Whoa , nice Jimmy . I haven't give feedback on your previous mission series but , I'll try to give feedback later . The story is awesome dude . Good luck . icon14.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 02:36 AM

I played the intro: it was quite short, but that's just an intro. The story and character's cast looks great.

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 06:01 AM

@Shiva - Thanks, man. No problem, play the intro when you can smile.gif

@-S-hark21 - Thanks a lot, man. I'm glad you like the base story. smile.gif

@Secronom President - Wow. Nice to finally see your comment around wink.gif Thanks a lot on the feedback. I know it's quite short, but you know me lol. I have to have some kind of a start. And thanks again smile.gif

More missions on the way biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 06:18 AM

Hehe, I've been waiting for this. I'll give this a try later. wink.gif

And nice theme song BTW. biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 06:20 AM

QUOTE (xGhostx @ Wednesday, Jul 25 2012, 06:18)
Hehe, I've been waiting for this. I'll give this a try later. wink.gif

And nice theme song BTW. biggrin.gif

Haha. Cool. Waiting for your feedback then smile.gif And thanks, I had a few choices, but that song was kinda the best for the story biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 06:58 AM

Awesome Jimmy! I'll play Kidnapped to the end today and then continue with this. icon14.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 07:03 AM

QUOTE (Notna @ Wednesday, Jul 25 2012, 06:58)
Awesome Jimmy! I'll play Kidnapped to the end today and then continue with this. icon14.gif

Great, man, thanks a lot. Looking forward to your feedback on Kidnapped and here aswell wink.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 09:06 AM

I'm still playing Kiddnaped,but i need to watchout on my storyline GTA: SAS cause of realase date. Anyway i'm going to finish playing kiddnaped only three last missions i've not played. I'll give you feddback (full) then this i'll play. icon14.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 10:31 AM

Great introduction! I love it.

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 10:51 AM

@ AnDReJ - Thanks a lot, man. Looking forward to your feedback on Kidnapped then and the feedback on this too smile.gif

@ Kratos - Wow. Thanks a lot, man smile.gif I'm glad you liked the intro. biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 02:20 PM

UPDATE: Logo added. biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 02:47 PM

I'll play this when you finish Chapter 1 wink.gif
Btw, nice logo biggrin.gif

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Posted 25 July 2012 - 03:19 PM

QUOTE (lee_atsugai @ Wednesday, Jul 25 2012, 14:47)
I'll play this when you finish Chapter 1 wink.gif
Btw, nice logo biggrin.gif

Ok, man. Thanks a lot biggrin.gif

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 12:10 AM

Hmm, the logo's pretty cool, but a little weird...just like the theme song.

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 06:00 AM Edited by Jimmy_Leppard, 26 July 2012 - 06:08 AM.

QUOTE (xGhostx @ Thursday, Jul 26 2012, 00:10)
Hmm, the logo's pretty cool, but a little weird...just like the theme song.

LOL, why is that? I mean, ZZ Top is classic for action themes. Perhaps the theme song is weird to you cause of the singer's voice, but it's still pretty good considering it's made back in 1973. And about the logo.. I think it's pretty cool, man. Everything that needed to be shown or said is in it. Not to many and not to little stuff. But, if you think it's weird, well.. Your taste, man smile.gif Too bad you find it weird.

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 08:21 AM

Update: 2nd mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks, dudes biggrin.gif

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 03:30 PM

I played the intro and second mission. AMAZING MISSIONS AND LOGO. I can't wait for next mission. icon14.gif icon14.gif

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 03:46 PM

QUOTE (nitrousoxide @ Thursday, Jul 26 2012, 15:30)
I played the intro and second mission. AMAZING MISSIONS AND LOGO. I can't wait for next mission. icon14.gif icon14.gif

Hey, man. Thanks a lot smile.gif I'm glad you liked the missions so far biggrin.gif

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 03:48 PM

Played the missions. Very good.

I think you got inspired by fast five, right?
it's very similar.

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 04:57 PM

QUOTE (caio3771 @ Thursday, Jul 26 2012, 15:48)
Played the missions. Very good.

I think you got inspired by fast five, right?
it's very similar.

Yeah, pretty much smile.gif But I have my own twists for this wink.gif Thanks a lot, man biggrin.gif

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 07:04 PM

Hey!What why ... ?Ok, allright another mission pack by JIMMY!!!YAY!!!I will play it for sure, hope you will finish it and don't cancel it...wait what?

Good luck!

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Posted 26 July 2012 - 08:46 PM

QUOTE (tinu09 @ Thursday, Jul 26 2012, 19:04)
Hey!What why ... ?Ok, allright another mission pack by JIMMY!!!YAY!!!I will play it for sure, hope you will finish it and don't cancel it...wait what?

Good luck!

Hey, man biggrin.gif I don't cancel my mission series. I finished Kidnapped, so I moved to this project biggrin.gif Thanks smile.gif

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Posted 27 July 2012 - 06:17 AM Edited by Jimmy_Leppard, 28 July 2012 - 01:13 PM.

UPDATE: 3rd and 4th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks, people biggrin.gif

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Posted 28 July 2012 - 04:00 PM

Okay , just played mission 1 until 4 . So , here's my feedback .

What I see in this mission series is almost the same as Fast & Furious 5 . I really like how you introduce each of the character . Makes me wonder how do they job . In the second mission , I don't really like about all 7 partners follow me in that meat factory . They just get into my way and I can't shoot the guards . In the fourth mission , I like the race but you could give them some proper route . So that they won't just bump into things . Other than that , good job . I eagerly waiting for the next mission . icon14.gif

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Posted 28 July 2012 - 04:16 PM

I had only time to play the first mission. Anyway, here's what I think about the missions.
The 1st mission was just like watching a movie. I enjoyed the characters introductions part. It was really awesome and cool. I was suprised to find Brian Thompson (I know Zack is the protagonist but I use to call that actor Brian Thompson, you know lol.. Loved the shootout in the second mission. I'm gonna play the remaining missions soon. biggrin.gif

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Posted 28 July 2012 - 04:28 PM

@ -S-hark21 - First of all, thanks for the feedback. smile.gif Now, let me explain the route problem at the race. I tried to get them on the right route and to get them race straight, but something just doesn't seem to be working. I know, I was trying to solve the route problem for like 2 hours. I made them drive 4 or 5 different routes, but they always went in circles and bumping into things at the very beginning. I just didn't know why and how to solve that problem, so I just went with the best possible way I could pull out of it.. So, I know, it kinda sucks, it's supposed to be an intense race, but that's the best I came up with.

@ Shiva - Thanks a lot, man biggrin.gif LOL, I know, but now you can call him Brian and Zack smile.gif Again, thanks for your feedback wink.gif

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Posted 30 July 2012 - 08:34 AM

So I just played the missions, so here's my feedback:
BTW, I'm gonna get a little serious here...almost...

Mission 1: You should have call this one Fast Five, it will get more attention. I mean it exactly like it, I remember all the quotes and stuff, I think there's a girl, too (the one who's driving the motorcycle). Anyway, love the cutscene, love how you introduce the characters and their specialists. The mission was fine or an intro. And once again with the ''to be continued'' stuff, really don't like it, never did.
I'm not rating this mission as a normal mission, I rated it as an intro, that's why it's so high although with cutscene only.

Rating: 9.5/10


Mission 2: I think you should change the first car, I don't know if you're lazy by choosing the first car in the car menu but the car look old, to me it doesn't fit. In the meat factory, the shooting was fine and easy. But when Zach just said ''We ain't stealing'', you should have make use of the fire object, saying ''we're burning it...'' doesn't sound cool at all, I mean if you want it to look like the movie.

Rating: 7/10

Mission 3: Hmm, smart, changing from a safe to a truck trailer...BTW, you make The Rock look suck by using Woozie skin. And you misspelling O'Conner.

Rating: 7/10

Mission 4: Yeah the mission is simple, just a little bit racing that's all, but it too easy for me.

Rating: 6.5/10

Overall, your writing is good as usual, but you really should have made Fast Five, I mean Zach O'Conner? Anyway, keep up the good work.
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Posted 30 July 2012 - 09:18 AM

QUOTE (xGhostx @ Monday, Jul 30 2012, 08:34)
So I just played the missions, so here's my feedback:
BTW, I'm gonna get a little serious here...almost...

Mission 1: You should have call this one Fast Five, it will get more attention. I mean it exactly like it, I remember all the quotes and stuff, I think there's a girl, too (the one who's driving the motorcycle). Anyway, love the cutscene, love how you introduce the characters and their specialists. The mission was fine or an intro. And once again with the ''to be continued'' stuff, really don't like it, never did.
I'm not rating this mission as a normal mission, I rated it as an intro, that's why it's so high although with cutscene only.

Rating: 9.5/10


Mission 2: I think you should change the first car, I don't know if you're lazy by choosing the first car in the car menu but the car look old, to me it doesn't fit. In the meat factory, the shooting was fine and easy. But when Zach just said ''We ain't stealing'', you should have make use of the fire object, saying ''we're burning it...'' doesn't sound cool at all, I mean if you want it to look like the movie.

Rating: 7/10

Mission 3: Hmm, smart, changing from a safe to a truck trailer...BTW, you make The Rock look suck by using Woozie skin. And you misspelling O'Conner.

Rating: 7/10

Mission 4: Yeah the mission is simple, just a little bit racing that's all, but it too easy for me.

Rating: 6.5/10

Overall, your writing is good as usual, but you really should have made Fast Five, I mean Zach O'Conner? Anyway, keep up the good work.
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Thanks for the feedback, now the explanations. biggrin.gif

Well, most of you figured out it's based on Fast Five. I didn't want to call it that way cause it's not the real Fast Five story since there is no girl in the story, there's no Dom, Brian, Roman etc. and there's no real connection to the characters except the base story.

About the second mission: I did put the fire object after the cutscene ''We're burning it'', but the mission then crashed for me and it couldn't be fixed, so I had to improvise. Of course I tried to put the fire object, but unfortunately, it was an overload. And, I actually didn't want to look exactly like the movie, so.. that's why I improvised as I did wink.gif

About the third mission: As said, this is not Fast Five complete story, it's just a base, so there's no ''The Rock''. There's just an FBI agent called Howard Loom. I chose Woozie for a reason. I didn't want to choose some steroid guy to catch the team, but someone more inteligent and ''cooler'', sort of speak. And yeah, about the O'Conner thing.. I saw it after I uploaded the mission.. but it's just one letter, so I think it isn't worth mentioning. Everyone has typing mistakes when typing fast. And there's no ''perfect'' thing in life, so.. smile.gif

About the fourth mission: Yeah, I know. I already explained that I had problems with route points for other car racers and they just kept bumping into stuff at the very beginning, so it does kinda sucks, but.. That's the best I could do.


Anyway, thanks for the great feedback as always, man. Looking forward to your next feedback biggrin.gif




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