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Posted 10 December 2011 - 12:48 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 16 June 2012 - 07:19 PM.

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Shooting in Las Venturas (SiLV)


"Las Venturas - the town of money, casinos, hotels, girls and... gangs" - David Williams

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1992 year. Las Venturas. David Williams came to the town of a casino. He is from Liberty City. He was a gangsta' there. But after he had got two gun shots from some Mafia mobsters, he was in the hospital for two weeks. Dave decided to start a new life, without crime. He had finished all his business and moved to San Andreas state, to Las Venturas. He had found a work as a taxi driver and bought a flat on the outskirts of the town. A month passed... David went to a night work of a taxi driver. He delivered some passengers. And when he was resting, one man got in his car and cried to hit the gas. There were some gangsters, who were following this man. When David had lost them, he took that man to his place. He called himself as Mark Cooper, gave the money to Dave and proposed to be in a gang called Dimes. David thought for a while and accepted the proposition. He decided to back to the crime life.

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David Williams - he is 25 years old and he's from Liberty City. He was a gangsta' in LC, but after Dave had got two gun shoots from Mafia, he decided to start a new life in Las Venturas, without crime. He worked there for a month, as a taxi driver. One day, he saved a man. His name is Mark Cooper and he's from the Dimes gang. After that day, David is a gangster of Dimes gang.

Mark Cooper - he is 27 years old and his hometown is Las Venturas. He finished the secondary school and right after this went into a Dimes gang. Mark doesn't have a very high rank in the gang, but he's a very known person in it. He is probably the best friend of David. Mark is very honest and loyal to his gang and he will kill anyone who will cross the road of Dimes.

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Dimes
Dimes is the weakest gang in Las Venturas. The leader formed it in 1992 to protect himself, because there was the biggest crime level in San Andreas state in that year.

Status: Friends .
Leader: Coming soon.

Wolfs
Wolfs is one of the most powerful gangs in Las Venturas. This gang shares its powerful with another gangs, that are the enemies with Dimes.

Status: Enemies .
Leader: Coming soon.

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Map details:
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The status of the missions and chapters:

Completed.
Work in progress (WIP).
Not even started working on.

Chapter 1 - Welcome to Las Venturas. Progress - 100%. (Download)
1. Intro .
2. The preposition .
3. Initiation .
4. Fight with Wolfs .
5. Expanding the sphere of influence .
6. Ambush .
7. A new mob war .
8. Drive By .
9. Outro .

Chapter 2 - The Real Beginning
1. Intro .
2. Some conversation .
3. Blowing work .
4. My Boss is Your Boss .
5. Take some rest, dude .

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Posted 10 December 2011 - 12:53 PM

Cool idea, Darky. icon14.gif Good luck, or how we Russians say, Udachi. biggrin.gif

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Posted 10 December 2011 - 12:55 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 10 December 2011 - 02:33 PM.

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Cool idea, Darky.† icon14.gif Good luck, or how we Russians say, Udachi. biggrin.gif

Haha, thanks a lot, SF.

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Posted 10 December 2011 - 12:57 PM

QUOTE (SatournFan @ Saturday, Dec 10 2011, 19:53)
Udachi. biggrin.gif

Make me remembered to BUYSAG tounge.gif

Good luck with this, especially being the first storyline you published here icon14.gif


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Posted 10 December 2011 - 01:09 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 10 December 2011 - 02:18 PM.

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Good luck with this, especially being the first storyline you published here icon14.gif

Thanks.

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Posted 11 December 2011 - 09:56 AM

Good luck icon14.gif icon14.gif I will definitely play this biggrin.gif

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Posted 11 December 2011 - 10:14 AM

QUOTE (KaRzY6 @ Sunday, Dec 11 2011, 11:56)
Good luck icon14.gif icon14.gif I will definitely play this biggrin.gif

Hah, thanks a lot, KaRzY6 smile.gif .

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Posted 11 December 2011 - 10:40 AM

Good luck whatever it is. icon14.gif

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Posted 11 December 2011 - 10:45 AM

QUOTE (john12 @ Sunday, Dec 11 2011, 12:40)
Good luck whatever it is. icon14.gif

Thanks a lot. smile.gif

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Posted 12 December 2011 - 05:21 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 30 January 2012 - 09:48 AM.

UPDATE:
I've collected enough ideas and started working on storyline. I also added some info about the missions of the first Chapter.

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Posted 18 December 2011 - 03:05 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 18 December 2011 - 05:23 PM.

UPDATE:
Chapter 1 is released. Download, play and give feedbacks.
Also: Character, mission and gang list are updated.

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Posted 19 December 2011 - 07:16 AM Edited by SatournFan, 19 December 2011 - 08:16 AM.

F*ck yeah, finally. Gonna play this and give feedback, for sure.

EDIT: Completed. Yeah, already. Kinda interesting, but few remarks:

-English. You need to practice a bit more. I was surprised after seeing your English.
-Missions. I never saw your missions before, but anyway, you need to improve a bit.

Anyway, grats for your first mission pack, and good luck. icon14.gif

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Posted 19 December 2011 - 11:23 AM

I've just downloaded it, Gonna play it and give you feedbacks. Anyway, story looks great. I dont mind if you're english is not good.

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Posted 19 December 2011 - 12:21 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 27 December 2011 - 10:10 AM.

Thanks for your honest feedback, boys. I admit, that —hapter 1 isn't very good. It was boring, because the missions are given from character. And English was not very good. I just had no time for the missions. But now, I have much more time and the next Ůhapters will be much better.
And, speaking about the missions of the —hapter 1, I would say, that it was like intro to the series. I mean, that in the next chapters will be much more action, characters, etc. English will be better. I also tried to use a ''gangster's slang'', but it wasn't very good. But it will be better in the next Ůhapters.

QUOTE (SatournFan @ Monday, Dec 19 2011, 09:16)
I was surprised after seeing your English.

In what direction? Bad or good?

QUOTE (SatournFan @ Monday, Dec 19 2011, 09:16)
I never saw your missions before

I never uploaded my missions to any website... Until this time. biggrin.gif

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Posted 19 December 2011 - 02:09 PM

QUOTE (Darkseller63 @ Monday, Dec 19 2011, 12:21)
I admit, that Chapter 1 isn't very good. It was boring, because the missions are given from character.

First of all, have confidence on yourself. You should have confidence on yourself to achieve success. You shouldnt admit that your missions are boring. Dont loose your efforts. Keep on striving and one day you'll touch the top.

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Posted 19 December 2011 - 02:39 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 27 December 2011 - 10:11 AM.

QUOTE (shiva s @ Monday, Dec 19 2011, 16:09)
QUOTE (Darkseller63 @ Monday, Dec 19 2011, 12:21)
I admit, that Chapter 1 isn't very good. It was boring, because the missions are given from character.

First of all, have confidence on yourself. You should have confidence on yourself to achieve success. You shouldnt admit that your missions are boring. Dont loose your efforts. Keep on striving and one day you'll touch the top.

No, I don't lose the confidence in myself. I just said above, that I hadn't a lot of time, so the missions of the —hapter 1 aren't very good.

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Posted 20 December 2011 - 07:03 AM

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In what direction? Bad or good?


Bad. Seeing your English here and in missions, you're just two different guys! Anyway, waiting for Chapter 2. All luck I can give. icon14.gif

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Posted 20 December 2011 - 12:48 PM

QUOTE (SatournFan @ Tuesday, Dec 20 2011, 09:03)
Anyway, waiting for Chapter 2. All luck I can give. icon14.gif

Thanks, man. smile.gif

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Posted 20 December 2011 - 07:04 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 30 January 2012 - 09:48 AM.

UPDATE:
I started working on Chapter 2. Stay tuned.

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Posted 28 December 2011 - 08:45 PM Edited by AnDReJ98, 13 January 2012 - 07:59 PM.

Cool idea dude! icon14.gif

EDIT: When you'll upload chapter two,i can't wait.

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Posted 08 January 2012 - 02:35 PM Edited by AnDReJ98, 09 January 2012 - 11:58 AM.

How did you get these images? How did you make logo?


Edit: SatournFan-Sorry,i wont double posting.I'm so sorry.

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Posted 09 January 2012 - 04:19 AM

Stop double-posting, man! Seriously, it started to annoy me!

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Posted 15 January 2012 - 12:33 PM

QUOTE (AnDReJ98 @ Sunday, Jan 8 2012, 16:35)
How did you get these images? How did you make logo?

I've used Photoshop.

About the storyline: Chapter 2 is coming soon. I haven't got a lot of spare time for DYOM, that's why the missions are on hold.

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Posted 01 June 2012 - 12:59 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 01 June 2012 - 01:43 PM.

I'm bumping and double-posting, but this is my topic... I want to say you that...

Shooting in Las Venturas is now running!

It was on hold, because I didn't have a lot of time to work on it. But now I'm going to work on the missions! Chapter 2 will be released in a while. Also, the topic will be updated. Play Chapter 1, if you want to know the plot, and give a feedback. So, stay tuned and wait for new updates! smile.gif

By the way, this is my 200th post! smile.gif

Also, congrats with the first day of summer! smile.gif

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Posted 01 June 2012 - 01:06 PM

Oh, finally! I was waiting for the second chapter so badly. G'luck in designing, DS. icon14.gif

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Posted 01 June 2012 - 01:20 PM

I've played Chapter one in December,so that means i'll play Chapter two! Goodluck!

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Posted 01 June 2012 - 01:28 PM

I'm playing this and i have to say...

It's amazing! Very well written, good story
and a lot of action.
Continue with this,
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Posted 02 June 2012 - 09:39 AM

Played chapter 1.

The missions were good and fun to play. The variety of missions was really good, though most of the missions were a bit easy. You could have kept a mixture of enemies with and without head shots to make it more difficult. I think you had kept all of them with head shot enabled.

You need to improve on your writing. Even though it was understandable, there were a lot of grammatical errors.

In terms of the story, it was just another gangsta type story where one gang goes to fight another. It would be interesting to bring a twist or two in the story.

Even if there was a lack of interesting story, the gameplay was really good and fun to play. In the last mission, Mark didn't enter the car, and I had to runover the wolves with three stars at the end of the level and had to change my cars and survive at the same time. biggrin.gif

Looking forward to the next chapter.

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Posted 12 June 2012 - 07:45 PM Edited by Darkseller63, 15 June 2012 - 08:39 PM.

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Played chapter 1.

The missions were good and fun to play. The variety of missions was really good, though most of the missions were a bit easy. You could have kept a mixture of enemies with and without head shots to make it more difficult. I think you had kept all of them with head shot enabled.

You need to improve on your writing. Even though it was understandable, there were a lot of grammatical errors.

In terms of the story, it was just another gangsta type story where one gang goes to fight another. It would be interesting to bring a twist or two in the story.

Even if there was a lack of interesting story, the gameplay was really good and fun to play. In the last mission, Mark didn't enter the car, and I had to runover the wolves with three stars at the end of the level and had to change my cars and survive at the same time. biggrin.gif
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Thanks a lot for the feedback, dude. And yeah, this was my first try in DYOM.

Alright, it's time for the next UPDATE:
The second chapter is in progress now and it has almost 50% now. So, I hope to finish it as soon as I can. Stay tuned, girls and boys! biggrin.gif Also, watch for updates in the main topic.




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