HOLY f*ckING sh*t! I cannot believe that took me 3 hours to complete your mission pack man.
First you impressed me with Leon Ridge, then you impress me with BTH, now you blown my mind away with this. (Ok I exaggerated, but who cares
). You really lived up to your quote on this one "quality over quantity"
The things in green
are things I liked.
The things in red
are things that can be improved
I love how simple you kept the story at first, then becomes even more complex at each chapter is played. You made very interesting characters that one would enjoy. Few of the events in the first 2 chapters can easily be predictable
(an example would be Gordon as the snitch
) reason for that was because he was the only one not connected with the protagonist very well, however it did not really hurt the story much, however did not pull a huge suspense. I also noticed you used a different skin for Gordon, when he killed Stan.
At the 3rd chapter, things started to get even more exciting especially since every mission has a cliffhanger keeping the player interested. I also was noticing that the missions were getting so much longer with so much more detail. This really proved that you can make missions with very little action and still keep them enjoyable. The executions were interesting because it gave that cold feeling with the line "You know what to do"?The last chapter was the part that was unpredictable.
. I really did not know who else was going to die..who to trust..my natural instinct was that Holding
was gonna be a bad guy, learned from other stories.. Never trust an FBI agent
. Instead you made it make sense.
Did not expect the ending to be anything like that. I expected it to be at Los Santos. I knew some people had to die.. Did not know who or where it was going to happen, but you pulled that twist and ending off pretty nice
It is getting to be a long post, so I will keep the criticism to the point. Overall it is hard to find it, you enjoy it so much, you forget what can be improved. One thing I felt that was really repetitive was the locations. Because the story was little closed in to few locations, it felt little repetitive driving to the same places, however because something new was happening every time, it made up for that a little. It would of been nice to see a little more variety, but I am glad it was not forced.
The other thing that could of improved was if you involved the kid who was suppose to be assassinated in the story a little more. He was only seen once. I could be wrong, maybe they did kill him and I forgot about it, but the story could of been interesting if Jeff was going to protect the target.
I am little shocked myself that I am giving a rating this high..but this story was the best one so far..correct me if I already rated something of yours this high..but here it goes..9.5/10
Edited by Doublepulse, 11 January 2012 - 05:10 AM.