Loved the mission mate, nice dialogue and a great set up for the shootout. I liked how you killed off Tony and the surprise came across really well. I also liked Carlo's flashbacks, but I'm not too far into the story, so can't recall the event, however it still had a powerful effect, and is a great asset of Carlo's character. Since I'm still reading through the first parts of the concept, could you tell me if Andriy is linked to Dimitri Rascalov or Kenny Petrovic? It's a while since I played through the portion of GTA IV that features this location and time of the mission.
Tony's death seems to be a big hit with the readers so far
Andriy is linked to Dimitri Rascalov but I also imagine him having some ties to Petrovic (I might actually allude to this in the next mission). What I'm actually gonna do is go back in and link the text about the flashbacks to the chapters they refer in order to make it more understandable for newcomers like yourself. Also 600 posts!!