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#31

Posted 20 June 2010 - 02:08 PM

UPDATE:
Chapter Nine - Ace of Spades has been uploaded in its entirety now. It's not my best but i wanted to give you guys something.

As always comments are appreciated.

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Posted 20 June 2010 - 11:30 PM

Johnny's a bad-ass poker player! Lol

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Posted 24 June 2010 - 11:29 PM

QUOTE (nufc.neilo @ Jun 20 2010, 23:30)
Johnny's a bad-ass poker player! Lol

Haha not as good as Marston,

New chapter's in the works people.. hang tight! tounge.gif

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Posted 19 July 2010 - 09:04 AM

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ May 2 2010, 12:36)
Mallorie inherited the business.

So Does this story spin of the deal branch at the end of gta 4?

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Posted 19 July 2010 - 12:19 PM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Jul 19 2010, 09:04)
QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ May 2 2010, 12:36)
Mallorie inherited the business.

So Does this story spin of the deal branch at the end of gta 4?

Yes it does. Niko has chosen to forgive Dimitri, taken the deal. Roman has died and Niko is left feeling empty.


Apologies to everyone who's following this.

THIS IS NOT DEAD , I have been quite busy lately, writing for GTA:Thames City, and my own projects, while trying to fit it all around work etc.

I do have a chapter half done, and i will be posting it soon.

Also, i have a concept for a follow up - but that will ONLY be written if there's enough interest, so the more people post, the more likely i am to A priorities this over other things, and B write the follow up.

Thanks for reading, please share it with anyone smile.gif

oh and comments/questions/suggestions/observations are encouraged smile.gif

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Posted 20 July 2010 - 12:00 AM Edited by megahypernova, 20 July 2010 - 12:03 AM.

I Also added you to my respect list, you and the guy who made the tales from liberty city concept forum icon14.gif

EDIT: i also added you on xbox live!

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Posted 20 July 2010 - 04:23 AM

i noticed you have two reserved posts, since you already got nine chapters in the first why not start the next one? i also had an idea if you do this they should be divided as sequences, the first would be the first nine chapters, and the next would be for new ones, and if you title the sequences had an idea for the name of the first one

"OLD ALLIES, NEW ENEMIES"

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Posted 22 July 2010 - 11:29 AM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Jul 20 2010, 00:00)
I Also added you to my respect list, you and the guy who made the tales from liberty city concept forum icon14.gif

EDIT: i also added you on xbox live!

Ah, THAT's who that was!
I had no idea who it was so i didn't accept.That said i don't play online much, but if i'm feeling kind i may add you again tounge.gif

Seriously though, thanks for the respect list add, and for checking out the story.

Due to work commitments, i'm struggling to find the time ATM to write this. My efforts are going into the story of GTA: Thames City, so this has taken a back seat.
However, i am giving you all my word that this story is not dead, and i'm still making slow progress with it. The story itself is starting to near its end too. things are going to get crazy.... smile.gif

at the risk of a double post, i'll post when i've uploaded any smile.gif

Thanks for reading guys and please, share it! If anyone wants to see the sequal, please send me a PM message, or post on here so i can gauge how much interest there is. smile.gif The 2nd one will only be written if enough people want it smile.gif

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Posted 29 July 2010 - 09:19 PM

Wait a second, could that hispanic in a car that Johnny recognized possibly be Luis?

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Posted 30 July 2010 - 12:14 AM

QUOTE (The Lolwut Pear @ Jul 29 2010, 21:19)
Wait a second, could that hispanic in a car that Johnny recognized possibly be Luis?

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"Get out of the way bro!" A hispanic called leaning out of the window. He looked vaguely familiar, but Johnny couldn't place the face.
He didn't respond though, just stood and crossed the road


If you mean that bit - then yes, it was tounge.gif

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Posted 13 August 2010 - 12:22 PM

this is dead sad.gif

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Posted 15 August 2010 - 11:17 PM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Aug 13 2010, 12:22)
this is dead sad.gif

Nah, it's not.
I've vowed to not let it die.
I've been very busy with work and working on 02fishera's "GTA Thames City" recently, that, regretfully, this has suffered from.

I am still writing on it, but have fallen way behind schedule on both GTA TC and this story.

But i can promise you - it's not dead, and i'm going to try to make the next update BIG smile.gif


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Posted 16 August 2010 - 01:43 PM

[b] Chapter Ten is up.... well, most of it.

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.


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Posted 20 August 2010 - 09:11 AM

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Aug 16 2010, 10:43)
[b] Chapter Ten is up.... well, most of it.

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.

it was perfect! btw when are you going to introduce luis, you've made a few references to him already confused.gif colgate.gif turn.gif

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Posted 20 August 2010 - 10:41 AM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Aug 20 2010, 09:11)
QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Aug 16 2010, 10:43)
[b] Chapter Ten is up....  well, most of it.

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.

it was perfect! btw when are you going to introduce luis, you've made a few references to him already confused.gif colgate.gif turn.gif

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Posted 21 August 2010 - 06:22 PM

Wayhey! As Harry Hill would say... FIIIIGGGGHHHTTTT! lol classic. Are we nearly at the end?

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Posted 21 August 2010 - 11:40 PM

QUOTE (nufc.neilo @ Aug 21 2010, 18:22)
Wayhey! As Harry Hill would say... FIIIIGGGGHHHTTTT! lol classic. Are we nearly at the end?

getting there. about 3/4 there i think. everything is planned out
An update to everyone, i have written the final chapter - the end has been written. all that remains are a few steps leading to the final revaluation, if you will, and its done.
When the story's done i will be asking people if i should write the "sequal" which would follow the REVENGE story of IV..... feel free to post your thoughts now - the more replies the better.

And please spread the word, not just for my story, but for this little hidden section that it seems not many people visit...

As always, thanks for reading, and ANY thoughts or comments are welcome, so long as you're respectfull...

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Posted 06 September 2010 - 08:43 AM

when are you gonna add the next part?

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Posted 06 September 2010 - 11:42 AM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Sep 6 2010, 08:43)
when are you gonna add the next part?

simply when i get time to write it.
Work's a bit busy atm and, without going into details, i am simply unable to let this take precedence over work, and staring at a computer screen all day at work don't help.
Also, my priority is writing the Thames City story - when i've written the next part of that (the story's in parts) i can focus on this a little more.

It's not a question of WANT but time. I'd love to blow work off for a week and write but, not only can i not afford that, the work i do i am simply unable to just leave....


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Posted 20 September 2010 - 11:39 PM

NEW CHAPTER IS UP!
I hope there's still interest in this.

It's nearing completion! Spread the word! Tell your friends.

Things are heating up!
Answers are coming, the climax is building!

as always, please comment, thoughts suggestions, speculations... ! and please tell your mates!

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Posted 21 September 2010 - 07:24 AM

like always...EPIC, lol now i have to wait for the next chapter lol.gif facedesk.gif moto_whistle.gif

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Posted 21 September 2010 - 04:59 PM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Sep 21 2010, 07:24)
like always...EPIC, lol now i have to wait for the next chapter lol.gif facedesk.gif moto_whistle.gif

thanks!
as i said, the end is looming, i have written the finale, and the chapters that lead up to it (The major events). now all that's left is to fill the inbetween tounge.gif

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Posted 22 September 2010 - 11:29 AM

cool,I'm waiting for the next chapter

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Posted 01 October 2010 - 02:58 AM

i made a cover for the book!!!!

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Posted 01 October 2010 - 04:44 AM

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki


Go Here To See The Article


R2 R1 L2 X left down right up left down right up

EXTRA HEALTH XD

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

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Posted 01 October 2010 - 12:10 PM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 04:44)
uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki


Go Here To See The Article


R2 R1 L2 X left down right up left down right up

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if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it biggrin.gif

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it biggrin.gif

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I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though smile.gif

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Posted 01 October 2010 - 09:20 PM

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Oct 1 2010, 09:10)
QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 04:44)
uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki


Go Here To See The Article


R2     R1     L2     X     left     down     right     up     left     down     right     up  

EXTRA HEALTH XD

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it biggrin.gif

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it biggrin.gif

icon14.gif

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though smile.gif

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

Go Here To Sign Up


left right L2 L1 R2 R1 R1 up down right L2

PARACHUTE XD

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Posted 03 October 2010 - 10:16 PM

QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 21:20)
QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Oct 1 2010, 09:10)
QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 04:44)
uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki


Go Here To See The Article


R2     R1     L2     X     left     down     right     up     left     down     right     up   

EXTRA HEALTH XD

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it biggrin.gif

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it biggrin.gif

icon14.gif

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though smile.gif

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

Go Here To Sign Up


left right L2 L1 R2 R1 R1 up down right L2

PARACHUTE XD

I'll have a ganders at it ( i don't sign up to many things though to be honest) smile.gif

But in future, say this in a PM, keep this topic on track please biggrin.gif


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Posted 03 October 2010 - 11:36 PM

QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Oct 3 2010, 19:16)
QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 21:20)
QUOTE (Mokrie Dela @ Oct 1 2010, 09:10)
QUOTE (megahypernova @ Oct 1 2010, 04:44)
uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki


Go Here To See The Article


R2       R1       L2       X       left       down       right       up       left       down       right       up     

EXTRA HEALTH XD

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it biggrin.gif

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it biggrin.gif

icon14.gif

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though smile.gif

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

Go Here To Sign Up


left right L2 L1 R2 R1 R1 up down right L2

PARACHUTE XD

I'll have a ganders at it ( i don't sign up to many things though to be honest) smile.gif

But in future, say this in a PM, keep this topic on track please biggrin.gif

ok colgate.gif

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#60

Posted 15 October 2010 - 11:00 PM

just a little update to say i worked on a chapter earlier. I will not tell you what it is other then:
It's a flashback.

got a few chapters waiting upload - not 100% happy with them yet but hold on. smile.gif

also, those who want to see a sequal, or alter-ual, now's the time to say so!

Post here or PM me. enough interest i will write it. not enough.... i MAY write it one day.....




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