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Posted 30 October 2009 - 01:25 PM

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(Story #9)

Episode Two, "Metastasis", Part Two

"Oh, f*ck. F*ck, f*ck, f*ck!" Carmine Fortunato threw his hands into the air in acquiesced surrender. "Arrrrrh, of course they sent you."

Joel and Slugger pinned him to the car he was about to enter. "What? Did you think Leo was up to this job?"

"F*ck, I dunno," Carmine said with obvious impatience. "Alright, what is it today, a beat-down or you gonna clip me right here in the street?"

"You know, Mister Scarcarell, I don't think like Carmine's attitude," Joel said. Slugger plunged his knee into his victim's abdomen, not too hard, but hard enough to send him crashing to the ground, the papers he carried exploding into the air like confetti.

Joel knelt down as Fortunato sat, doubled-over, on the ground desperately coughing to regain his breath. "Do you understand how just a little consideration can help you avoid situations like these?" Joel explained.

Numbers nodded and spluttered a croaky "yes" as he struggled to regain his breath.

"The Boss has given your operation to me. So, while you once paid-up to Phil, now you pay me." Joel looked at Carmine who had restored normal breathing. "Any problems with that?"

Carmine rocked back and forth on the ground. "Look, Joel, it aint... I mean no disrespect, but I'm between a rock and a hard place here." Joel gestured to Slugger who grabbed Carmine by the shoulders and raised him against the car again, perhaps for another knee in the gut.

"No! I'm being straight," Numbers said urgently, arms raised to defend vainly himself. "The Lost have taken over the operation. They've got me by the balls. I...-"

"What? You're paying them now?"

"No, they own me," Carmine said urgently. Joel and Slugger looked at eachother, mystified. "They..."

As his sentence ended abruptly, his expression relaxed completely.

"Oh, what the f*ck TOOK you?!" Carmine said, addressing someone behind Joel and Slugger. The duo, holding Carmine, shot glances behind them to see a tall, greasy guy wearing a leather jacket pointing a sawn-off shotgun at them.

"Hey, fellas," Leather-jacket said. "Mind letting him down?"

Pulling a small keychain device from his pocket, Carmine shouted at the greasy biker-type, "Does this f*ckin' thing even work, Geary? Or is it some elaborate joke by you f*ckers?" The gunman just shrugged. "What the f*ck took you?"

"Ah, trouble inside. Don' worry, we got here."

Another man, African-American and also in a leather jacket, holding a pump shotgun appeared from around the corner and walked slowly toward them.

"Alright, fellas, let's not get crazy here," Joel said, raising his hands in a half-hearted surrender.

"No, f*ck you, Joel," Carmine shouted, slapping Joel weakly across the mouth. Joel scowled with great displeasure. "Don't you ever f*ckin' come near me again, you hear me?" Carmine picked up his papers, and opened the car door.

"What do you want with these guys?"

Pointing to the gunmen, Carmine offered a final thought, "You do whatever the f*ck you like. I just don't want to see either of them again." With that, Joel and Slugger stood idle as Carmine drove away.

"You heard the man," Geary said. "Step into my office," he added, pointing them into the alleyway.

"Fellas, you're making a big f*ckin' mistake here," Joel warned. "You don't want to do this."

"Shut the f*ck-up," the second guy shouted as the four men walked into the alley. "You're dancing with The Lost, now, dickweed."

"You heard Big Tim," Geary added.

Slugger stopped walking. Instead, he spread his legs, wide, and walked backward, backing into Big Tim.

"What the f..- Get f*ckin' walkin' forward, lurch," Tim shouted contemptuously, pressing the shotgun into the back of Slugger's head. When compliance was not forthcoming, he hit Slugger with the butt of the gun.

Slugger doubled-over forward, causing Geary to emit a loud laugh in appreciation of his compadre's act. However, Slugger did not, as expected, fall to the ground. Instead, he doubled over, his head almost touching the ground, and, reaching behind himself, grabbed the legs of his escort, and yanked them out from under their owner using his own backside as the fulcrum.

Big Tim could barely register a "What the..-" before his feet were forward of Slugger's and gravity pulled him to the concrete with alarming force, splitting his skull as it impacted with the ground.

His fingers reflexively pulled the trigger and fired buckshot into the air.

The sheer speed of Slugger's actions caught Geary off-guard. And as he turned his sawn-off toward Slugger, Joel seized the moment and rammed him so that the barrel blast fired effectlessly into the dumpster. Slugger completed their ballet by kneeling, drawing his weapon and firing into Geary.

Joel crashed into a pile of discarded boxes, the shotgun fell to the ground and the biker bolted around the corner, away from Slugger's second bullet that plunged into the wooden fence.

Slugger ran to pursue him, but Joel shouted after him: "Let him go."

Instead, Slugger gave an arm to help Joel stand-up. "F*ck. Nice f*ckin' work, my friend," Joel said gesturing to the leather-jacketed guy lying on the ground, a great pool of blood under his head. "All that f*ckin' training... Sh!t, I knew there was a f*ckin' reason I kept you around."

Slugger gave a smirk, and Joel suggested they move the body into the dumpster. Fortunately, with two shotgun blasts and a couple of pistol shots echoing from the alleyway, witnesses were not sticking around to watch the aftermath. Police sirens could, however, be heard.

So, they leapt the fence, and ran. And, making their way through people's yards, Joel considered their predicament.

"We got the Five Families after us, the Russians, maybe some Irish f*ckers," he said. "What's a bunch o' bikers added to the mix, aye, my friend?"

"F*ckin' aye, Boss. F*ckin' aye."

"But, we better let Sammy know."

Not too far away, in a green, wooden home along Aspdin Drive, Bruno Narducci was at the kitchen bench in Gino's mother's home fixing a sandwich for his boss when Gino's phone rang. Bruno collected it from the bench.

"Yeah, okay." Walking into the adjoining lounge, he placed the plate on a side table to Gino's lounge chair and handed the phone to Gino. "It's Sammy."

"Yeah." Bruno didn't try to listen to his Boss's conversations, it was less stressful that way, but this he couldn't help but hear.

"HE WHAT?

"WE'RE WHAT?"

Gino's frustration overflowed into torrid rivers of expletives. Bruno's chin dropped as he heard the plate he'd just put down fly into the brickwork of the electric fireplace.

"So Joel's got us at war with The Lost, and Lou says the Pavanos are shooting at us?" That summarisation didn't help Gino's stress, letting fly another string of sailor-worthy expletive screams. Objects flew through the room, chairs were kicked into walls.

Finally, an eerie quiet descended on the lounge.

"Bruno," Gino called out.

"Yes, Boss?" Bruno stood still in the hallway, not sure if he should risk embarassing the boss by entering the room.

"That stress councillor... Ella?"

"Ellen?"

"Yeah," Gino confirmed. "Call her. Eh, use your phone. Mine ... appears to be broken."

"Sure, boss," Bruno replied. Sensing the urgency of the matter, he added, "Right away."

I am genuinely interested in feedback. If you'd prefer not to clog the thread, feel free to PM instead.


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Posted 30 October 2009 - 03:39 PM

Mitch, write a book on gta lol lol.gif

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Posted 30 October 2009 - 04:01 PM Edited by Big_Mitch_Baker, 30 October 2009 - 04:06 PM.

@ aragond : I was just razzin' ya about the "cloggin' the thread" thing, all in good fun biggrin.gif
I like the way you think out your plot devices before you write, your able to keep my attention (which is saying a lot 'cause o' this ADD generation I'm from)

@ Colt m14 : Wow! Such good review(s), I'm quite flabbergasted at how much ya'll appreciate my work. Thank you so very much icon14.gif

I agree that sometimes my paragraphs run a lil' long...I just start typing, trying to get an idea out there, and suddenly it's half a page mercie_blink.gif (In fact the two chapters "Bothering Boccino" and "The Trouble with Triads" was supposed to be one chapter, but each part of the story became too long...maybe if I wasn't such a wind bag with the descriptions tounge2.gif )

And Rocket Ronnys death was sudden and anti-climatic, but that's usually how it happens in real life. People usually die not with a bang, but with a whimper. I purposely built him up in the last few chapters, touching on his back story and giving him (and the reader) hope that he was going to "clean up" and get back together with his wife (just so it would mean more to the reader when he got shot).

@ .2D : With all this positive reinforcement, I'm starting to think maybe I should give professional writing a try...Still got a lot to learn, but at least I know I can weave an interesting tale from nothing smile.gif

And no worries, the Triads get what's coming to them...Next chapter Malvado gets his revenge, and Huang Lee pretty much decimates the rest of the Jaoming Triads in Chinatown wars.

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Posted 30 October 2009 - 09:10 PM Edited by .2D, 30 October 2009 - 11:47 PM.

I'd read em wink.gif .

Just finished a couple of paragraphs on my next story..gonna go beddy byes now, check it over tomorrow and write a little bit more..

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 02:45 PM Edited by bhlegend, 01 November 2009 - 07:35 PM.

Chapter 2

The Capture

JD was walking down the road towards Macs house to collect money he owed him for doing an errand for him.
As JD walked up the stairs to Macs front door he noticed that the door handle had been ripped off and the door was slightly open.
JD was at the top of the stairs abnd heard screaming coming from the house.He walked in and stayed close to the wall.He poked his head around the corner of the door way.He saw that Mac was tied to a chair with two men infront of him,one had a stick and the other had a knife.

"WHERE IS THE STASH"shouted one of the goons
"The stash of what?"Replied Mac
The goon with the knife shouted "The stash of all the weapons you stole from us!"
"Im not gonna tell you,your scum"said Mac who then spat on one of the goons shoe.

The goon rubbed the spit off his shoe onto Macs leg and whipped Mac's knee with the stick.

"AAAHH"Mac screamed out in pain
"Its in the cupboard in the corner"Replied Mac in a broken down voice.

As the goon opened the cupboard a metal slate smashed into his face and he fell to the floor unconcious
JD then ran in grabbed the knife out of the goons hand and slashed it across the goons chest who then fell to the floor in pain and JD stamped on his head which knocked him out.

JD untied Mac
"How did that metal slate pop out of the cupboard and hit him?"Questioned JD
"Thats my little trap i set up.I saw them coming down the road so i quickly set it just in case they get me,which they did."Replied Mac
"Well it worked" said JD.

They both then heard noises in the kitchen which sounded like someone was climbing through the window.
They rushed in and a man had climbed out of the window into the back yard.
He tried to escape but the back gate was locked and JD grabbed him from behind and pulled him to the floor.

"Where are you going then mate?"Asked JD
"To your mums house for a good time"Said the man who laughed
JD stamped on the mans ripcage and he heard it shatter.
The man groaned in pain.

"What gang are you from?"Asked JD
"Your mums"replied the man
JD then kicked the mans calf and then stamped on his shin bone.

"WHAT GANG!?"
"The Albanians"Replied the man with a quiet voice.

JD picked up the man and threw him outside of the yard with the other goons onto the middle of the road and left them there.
Him and Mac began to walk up the stairs but a delivery van pulled up and shouted out for Mac.
JD and Mac walked over and talked to the man.

"What?"Asked Mac
"We have something for you in the back"Replied the man
He got out of his car and went to the back.
Mac and JD followed.
As he opened the back three men with guns jumped out.

"GET IN THERE NOW,BOTH OF YOU"
JD and Mac got in the back with the three gunmen.The gunmen tied JD and Macs hands up.
Mac asked"Whats this about?"
One man replied"Shut up if you want your head kept on your body!"
JD said"We want to know now!"
The same man replied again "SHUT UP! You have to come with us to our boss"
"Why"Asked JD
"Because he asked us to capture you and he wants to see you.NOW NO MORE QUESTIONS OR YOU LOOSE ONE OF YOUR FINGERS FOR EVERY QUESTION ASKED!!!"

JD had a wierd gut feeling.
He looked around the van and saw a big sticker on the back which said PROPERTY OF ALBANIAN MOB
He whispered to Mac "Hey read that sticker over there".
Mac looked at the sticker and turned back to JD and said "We are in deep sh*t"

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 09:16 PM

This may be annoying, but will anybody add the Ancelottis? I've been awaiting their arrival since June. Now, one guy, not sure who it was(I think it was Rucke, but I may be wrong), suggested that new gangs like the Ancelotti Family, North Dominican Drug Dealers, Lupisella Family, etc., should be added with one slot(Say the Ancelotti Mansion for the Ancelottis) starting off, and as demand raises up for that gang, then more slots are added. This would be good for promotional activity.

On another note, why is the Faustin Bratva not on here, and also, why do the Petrovic Bratva have all the Faustin businesses? They were the main adversaries of the game!

Personally, I'd divide the two up.

Petrovic properties would be Petrovic's Mansion, Hove Beach XXX Shop, and the Weapons Warehouse.

Faustin properties would be the Faustin Mansion, Comrades, Cabaret Club, and the 69th Street Diner.

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Posted 31 October 2009 - 11:27 PM

QUOTE (Osric @ Oct 31 2009, 21:16)
This may be annoying, but will anybody add the Ancelottis? I've been awaiting their arrival since June. Now, one guy, not sure who it was(I think it was Rucke, but I may be wrong), suggested that new gangs like the Ancelotti Family, North Dominican Drug Dealers, Lupisella Family, etc., should be added with one slot(Say the Ancelotti Mansion for the Ancelottis) starting off, and as demand raises up for that gang, then more slots are added. This would be good for promotional activity.


I agree my man.LOL biggrin.gif

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Posted 01 November 2009 - 06:27 AM Edited by aragond, 01 November 2009 - 06:31 AM.

QUOTE (Osric @ Nov 1 2009, 07:16)
This may be annoying, but will anybody add the Ancelottis? I've been awaiting their arrival since June. Now, one guy, not sure who it was(I think it was Rucke, but I may be wrong), suggested that new gangs like the Ancelotti Family, North Dominican Drug Dealers, Lupisella Family, etc., should be added with one slot(Say the Ancelotti Mansion for the Ancelottis) starting off, and as demand raises up for that gang, then more slots are added.

I think it was Jacky Fiend that mentioned the timeline, but I don't think he was actually volunteering to add them, just saying that the Ancelottis wouldn't be added until BoGT was out and we learned a bit more about them and their hidey-holes, hang-outs and what-not.

For that to take place, we need Crapbox360 players to have bought and finished BoGT at least, gotten to the point where they could bear the thought of being dragged away from it for the one or two hours necessary to start documenting all the facinating things about it, including the Ancelottis and their characteristics. Based on how long this board went utterly silent once IV was released, I'd say that's about four days before we'll hear from them.

Of course, I have no idea who among the staff is a Xbox player to know who's going to fill in all the blanks for us. (What I do know is that I feel cheated that PC players like me will never get to use all those cool new weapons, those cool new cars nor the cool new missions and buildings with interiors that tease me in IV but that I can never enter.) biggrin.gif Either way, I'm sure it'll be in the next week or two.


However, before that happens, can I please comment on something you previously suggested, that Gracie Ancelotti's House, Alderney (She did get Gay Tony involved as an associate) is an option for an Ancelotti location.

I have said this before, indeed repeatedly, like a broken record biggrin.gif , and even getting others to agree with me, that Gracie's house was surely where she lived, that she was a civilian, and that mobsters would not conduct business -- much less use as a base for their operations -- out of a civilians home, particularly not their boss's daughter's home. If I may use a Sopranos parallel, would it not be equivalent to the family using Meadow's Algonquin Manhatten apartment as a base of operations?

The only way I could see Gracie's place being listed as a BUYG location justifiably is by saying that it wasn't her house at all, but a capo's house at which she was staying for protection. (Although, did Niko kidnap her from there? I don't recall.)

But, look, I'm not trying to dictate what is and is not, but to get folks to agree, disagree or tell me to shut the f*ck up. I mean, to say it three times and only get one comment ... I'm just saying. rolleyes.gif


QUOTE (continued...)
On another note, why is the Faustin Bratva not on here, and also, why do the Petrovic Bratva have all the Faustin businesses? They were the main adversaries of the game!

I'm assuming staff took the line that Mikhail was dead, his deputy had joined Petrovic, ergo the assets transferred to Petrovic on behalf of the Faustin widow.

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Posted 01 November 2009 - 08:33 AM

Essay? Well I have an Xbox but not BoGT.

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Posted 01 November 2009 - 10:46 AM

Ah, now I understand. I was just brainstorming with Gracie's house. But I think we could use the other properties I mentioned.

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Posted 01 November 2009 - 10:11 PM

Wow, being in a gang in Liberty City would be great! This BUYG thing looks great! I'd love to write for a gang, and I don't really care which gang I join (as long as I can write a lot of stories for the one I join of course).

Time to brainstorm.. yawn.gif

I'll post a chapter when I got one.

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 04:34 AM

New Characters: Daja “Shorty D” Johnson, Marlon “Tech 9” Bridges, Alphonse “Mad Money” Roberts and Mark “ Young Menace” Jones. Vincent “VinnyNuts” Gambino.


Chapter 2: The Deal with Hell.

(News)
Andre “Knocc Out” Jones, a local Northwood Rapper was shot and may possibly be dead. Another rapper who was reported to be with him a Jabori “Cents” Hamilton died today at 6:23 am of Respiratory failure, and internal bleeding. He was 16 years old. Meanwhile in other news President George Bush….. (TV Fades)

(Pulse Hart beeping)

I woke up in a very white room, it looks clean. But it smells like sh*t. I can hear the doctor talking about me, I was in a coma for a couple of days after the shooting. I couldn’t help it but I felt depressed ever since Cents was killed. “I…” I can’t say sh*t? “He…”. God damn it! Well I think I can still get up. (Doctor walks in with YM.) “Whoa Whoa sunny, calm down you got slow it.” Doc said. I moved my hands at my throat.
“Oh yes the Cyclein Gel, it’s meant to stop you from choking on salvia ,blood etc.” He said.
“Hear let’s see…” He said. He gave me a shot and in two minutes I could talk again. “How long I been hear?” I asked. “Two or Three…” Doc said. “Two Or Three what? I said with annoyance. “Weeks.” He said.
“Damn, how bad was I?” I asked. “Two bullets to the chest, one ricocheted upward into your trachea. The bullet in your hand went into your jaw, luckily only scraping the tongue.” He said to me.
“Mark what you doin here?” I asked. “Came to check you out, mom wants you home.” He said.
“Ah Ah Ah, before you go. Here’s some pills for your chest, take one for every ten minutes for 2 days.”
“Except for bedtime.” He said. And we left.

(Forge Records)
“ I’m sorry Andre, but I can’t keep on here, you got a rep man.” Tech said.
“What the hell, bra there’s was no problems when I stop selling and started writing.” I yelled.
“Look man, I would keep you, but I need this job man.” He said.
“Man f*ck Forge , and f*ck you too man.” I said and I left.
I have now backing, I go no money, and plus I need to fine who the hell killed Cents, and tried me.
I need to get my street cred back. I need to hook up with the rawest hustler out here.
“Yo Ym!, Playboy still in North Holland?” I asked. “Ah, I think so let me hit em up.” He said.
“He’s not answering his phone, dude always answers his phone.” My brother said with expression.
“Well let’s check him.” I said.

(Playboy’s Loft)
Knock*, Knock* I went at the door.
“Who the hell is it, and why should I care?!” PBX yelled.
“It Menace and Knocc!” I yelled.
I heard footsteps coming towards the door, man locks started to unlock.
“Wassup my niggas!!” He yelled.
“Fool would you stop yelling!” YM said.
“P, we need a place to hang for about a couple of months.” I said.
“Well, cuz it’s $480 a month.” P muttered under his breath.
“Dawg I got $900 in advance, this cool.” My brother said.
“Yea, that’s cool.” P said while counting the money.
While getting some things out the car I saw an old friends of mine, Tech9 and Mad Money.
Tech9 was one of the hustler’s most successful dealers, he was part of the MOB Aldeney crew, a set that has tight connections to North Holland, He also produced beats that made Dj Khaled cry, I’m talking Dr.Dre material, Mad Money was a fast rapper like me. He had all the damn guns you could want, so much that even the Mafia buys from him. “Hey T, Money! Over here!” I yelled waving trying to get there attention.
“Wassup Lay Lay, when you get out the hospital?” Tech9 asked. “A couple of hours ago; what’s up, how’s the early grind?” I said. “It’s been lame without you man, come back to the corner.” He said, “Well, I do need this money, ok but I’m gonna need some wheels.” I said. “Man, I just got this Voodoo, you can have.” He said. And then at that moment, I new that everything was gonna be cool. I grinded for almost a year, I had money like hell and my brother and I started Street Hustler Records, Which I invested all my money into. I f*cked everything up on December 25th 2004, while on my way to pay Playboy. I stopped at Middle Park to check out, this girl of mine and artist Shorty D. When a familiar face pop up. Aljeandro “Fat P” was sitting with a couple of his crew, one of them looked like one of the shooters at Latte X Studios, One of his best shooters were The Trunchez brothers, one of the had died the same night Cents did.
Then it hit me, They killed Cents, and tried to kill that guy Marc, and me. I reached for my Uzi, “Hey, what’s Knocc.” One of the crew members said. Every thing went in slow motion to me, Fat P had left and only his crew stayed, four of them were playing Basketball. Three of them were sitting on the beach I was facing towards, there is a blue Vincent behind me, parked with another member inside drunk. “What, you doing?” he yelled as I pulled the gun at him. I fired. The others pulled out their guns, I sprayed half the area with lead and ran towards my car. I killed two guys, four hours later I was dealing, when five squad cars rolled up and arrested me, I broke away and then they used beanbags to shoot me down. As I fell in the snow, I can hear Satan say “How dear you betray me! I gave you wealth and Riches, Immortality basically, you shall suffer!!” This deal I made to live, is becoming a burden.

(April 12, 2005)
“Andre Jones is on trial for Murder, Drug Dealing, Assault with a deadly weapon and over 12 counts of Conspiracy to Sell. He will be sentenced after the board picks his fate.”

(Inside the courtroom)
In the count of Murder we find Andre aka “Lay Lay” Jones, we find him not guilty, on the 12 Counts to Sell we find him guilty. For Drug Dealing and A/W/D/W we find him guilty. They said, and my heart dropped faster than a meteor. I started to cry, but only inside my head. “I find that Andre Jones be sentenced to 4 to 23 years in jail, bail is set at 4.5 million, you are eligible for parole in 2008.” The Judge banged the Gravel.
(Last Scene is with Andre being escorted out of the court house.)
This is the second time in my life have been to jail, it’s horrible, I’m 17 and I got four years. Then I remembered this will give me time to write. Also time to intensify my body and Lyrical style.

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 01:51 PM Edited by Osric, 04 November 2009 - 12:45 AM.

Okay, since there's no word on the Ancelottis being released, can I join the Irish Mob at Lucky Winkles Bar?

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 01:53 PM

QUOTE (Osric @ Nov 3 2009, 13:51)
Okay, since there's no word on the Ancelottis being released, can I join the Petrovic Bratva at 69th Street Diner.

NOOOOOOOOOO!!!

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 03:57 PM

QUOTE (tarnell @ Nov 3 2009, 13:53)
QUOTE (Osric @ Nov 3 2009, 13:51)
Okay, since there's no word on the Ancelottis being released, can I join the Petrovic Bratva at 69th Street Diner.

NOOOOOOOOOO!!!

Problem?

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 04:43 PM Edited by Osric, 04 November 2009 - 12:45 AM.

While I will stay in the Irish Mob, I do believe we should use that old idea of adding new gangs with just one property starting off and add more properties when demand grows for them.

Here's what we should add....(Now, with the Dominicans, I haven't played BOGT yet, so I'm making this up as I go along with them)

Ancelotti Family
Starting Property: Ancelotti Mansion, Algonquin
Starting Weapons: Baseball Bat, Pistol
Starting Vehicles: Sentinel, PMP 600

Lupisella Family
Starting Property: Lupisella Mansion, Bohan
Starting Weapons: Baseball Bat, Pistol
Starting Vehicles: Sentinel, PMP 600

North Dominican Drug Cartel
Starting Property: Luis's House, Bohan
Starting Weapons: Knife, Pistol
Starting Vehicles: Washington, Primo

Roth Syndicate
Starting Property: Roth's Hotel Suite, Algonquin
Starting Weapons: Knife, Pistol
Starting Vehicles: Sentinel, Stretch

Messina Family
Starting Property: Messina Family, Dukes
Starting Weapons: Baseball Bat, Pistol
Starting Vehicles: Sentinel, PMP 600

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Posted 03 November 2009 - 04:51 PM

QUOTE (Masterkraft @ Nov 3 2009, 15:57)
QUOTE (tarnell @ Nov 3 2009, 13:53)
QUOTE (Osric @ Nov 3 2009, 13:51)
Okay, since there's no word on the Ancelottis being released, can I join the Petrovic Bratva at 69th Street Diner.

NOOOOOOOOOO!!!

Problem?

yeah I wanted that place, no problem now tho, theres still a place left.

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#1548

Posted 03 November 2009 - 06:35 PM

Soanish Lords

Chapter 4

'Revenge is wrong'

Night has reached Liberty City and the crime is rising through the streets of south Bohan. Pedro and two other cholos were chilling in the barrio. Pedro is a big fun of weed and vodka, that’s what he was having from sunrise to sun down. As usual Pedro was smoking some weed and talking to some homies. As he was talking suddenly the phone started to vibrate and then a nice Puerto Rican song went off, it took him a few moments to realise that his phone was ringing, he looked at the screen, which said, ‘ Hernandez calling’ and he pushed the answer button.
‘Yo holmes get your ass to my place fast!’ the caller said and hangs up.
‘Yo cholos, Hernandez just called, lets go see what the f*ck is going on there, he seemed a little weird’ Pedro said and all three went down to the nearby car park. Hernandez’s place was not far away, 15 minutes to drive. When they reached the place, Hernandez was already waiting outside a building. Pedro and the two boys opened the door and smoke was coming out, they like to smoke with the window closed.
‘Yo dudes, here what happened’ Hernandez started to explain. So a few hours before the meet a big shootout went down near the triangle club, it was between some Spanish lords members, including Hernandez’s only brother, some North Holland Hustlers and of curse the pigs were involved. Unfortunately Hernandez’s brother got killed and so did the rest of the lords, but NHH members escaped safely.
‘So now you know what happened, what I want now is them putas dead! You down?’ Hernandez asked and without waiting for some replies gave everyone a pistol and mini smg.
‘Yeah ok we down for our clik men’ Pedro said. They all got in Hernandez’s primo. As Hernandez was driving the other were strapping. Soon they reached North Holland, so they were looking for some members to murder. Two African-American men were walking down the streets, one was wearing a white bandana, silver chain, red and white coat and long white track pants, the other one was wearing a massive winter coat and some large jeans. Hernandez slowed down and driving next to them.
‘Yo get the f*ck men, before we cap your Asses’ one of them shouted and spat on the car. Hernandez gave them an annoying look and opened the window down.
‘Time to die mothef*ckers’ as he shouted Pedro and the other two pulled out their pistols and blasted, leaving the two gangsters bleeding death in the cold streets. They continued and after blasting another nine NHH members finally the police was heard getting closer.
‘Yo we need to get out of here Hernan’ one of the guys shouted
‘Shut the f*ck up Andre’ he replied and continuing riding through
‘Yo seriously we need to get up out of here Holmes, the pigs are near men’ as Pedro exclaimed, Hernandez speed up and crashed into one of the gangster talking.
‘f*ck1 I don’t think the cops are the only problem’ Julio said and pointed behind. There were 3 patriots chasing us. Hernandez turned around and ordered to shoot. Pedro shoots one of the drivers and stopped one of the cars. Julio tried to shoot but as he got his head out of the car he got shot, instantly killing him.
‘Hell no, Julio is dead men’ Andre shouted and kept shooting.
‘f*ck him, keep shooting those bitches!’ Hernandez shouted looked back to see what is going on, as soon as he turned his head back to the front, a police car smashed into them, making the golden primo fly and crush on the nearby hotdog stand. Hernandez, the clik leader instantly died and so did the 20 year old Andre, who only joined the gang a few weeks ago. Pedro got out of the car, but couldn’t move, his injured both his legs, right hand. After a few moments of confusion he went unconscious. A black patriot stopped nearby and three people got out. They approached Pedro and one of them kicked him in the stomach, making his body turn. The other guy got out a pistol and loaded it. As he was about to shoot Pedro.
‘Don’t you even think about it! Police stay were you are’ A policeman shouted. The guys quickly run into the car and got away.

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#1549

Posted 03 November 2009 - 06:37 PM

Your posts were two hours apart and no-one had posted since. You could have quite easily edited your previous post.

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 06:01 AM

Isn't like the 1st story in gets the place not ,"I called it first!" kind of deal.

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 08:18 AM

QUOTE (Benjimino234 @ Nov 4 2009, 17:01)
Isn't like the 1st story in gets the place not ,"I called it first!" kind of deal.

Indeed it is Benny-boy.

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 08:33 AM

could someone rate my story please? Ill post another one today. Want to move to the petrovic bratva. smile.gif

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 12:16 PM

Sorry about my inactivity fellas, I know I promised I was going to kick this topic in the ass and get it pumping out the stories but as I've said, I've been busy with preparations for exams and after exams I've got graduation and a formal and also schoolies and a week at the coast with my family.

I'd like to thank Slingaaa, Masterkraft and Colt for steering the BUYG ship. Few laws too lay down;

@tarnell: please prevent yourself from 'spamming' up the thread, we worked very hard to get this thread stickied and I don't want to see it unpinned due to un-needed posting. Post if;

A) You have a story
B) You have a request
C) If it's necessary, enough of this 'NOOOOOOO!' business.

@Osric: We have enough gangs, we just did a huge roster cleanout, if BUYG somehow skyrockets too popularity in the next few weeks then we'll consider adding some more gangs. I'm also unsure what you mean by 'new gangs having one property then adding more as it grows', it was never an old rule to begin with.

Peace ya'll, see you guys in a few weeks,

~Skramz

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 03:48 PM Edited by aragond, 04 November 2009 - 04:23 PM.

QUOTE (skramz @ Nov 4 2009, 22:16)
Sorry about my inactivity fellas, I know I promised I was going to kick this topic in the ass and get it pumping out the stories but as I've said, I've been busy with preparations for exams and after exams I've got graduation and a formal and also schoolies and a week at the coast with my family.

I'd like to thank Slingaaa, Masterkraft and Colt for steering the BUYG ship. Few laws too lay down;
...
A) You have a story
B) You have a request
C) If it's necessary, enough of this 'NOOOOOOO!' business.
...
Peace ya'll, see you guys in a few weeks,

~Skramz

You've promised? You've said? Thanking people for steering what now?
Dude, I'm sorry, subtlety obviously isn't working -- 'cuz I've asked thrice now -- now I'm just gonna hafta get rude:

W H O _ A R E _ Y O U ?

You post like you're someone we should know, like you've been here for years, but you've been here, like a month .

I don't mean no disrespect -- truly, I don't -- but you're now starting to lay down the laws like . . . but you've been here a month . And, before you say "I've already told you", NO, you haven't. So, I have scoured your log and aside from learning you're not American ('cuz you have to wait for Borderlands a few extra days), and that you're an ozzie (which I ought to have known since your exams are now, not June), you look like this (maybe?), which doesn't help, ... AHHHHHH ...

A R E _ Y O U _ P H U S I O N ?

A . K . A . _ L O C H I E ?

Mate, why did I have to go and research all that? cry.gif cryani.gif
(No, it is/wasn't obvious, and some of your own fellow staff didn't know this.
Well ... assuming I'm even right. Which doesn't seem as likely when I consider that Phusion isn't an active GTAF member, let alone BUYG ... ratings by Phusion who's never posted but HAS editted your own post?!?! Is it a mod?! notify.gif )

Just leaving this here under your categories (B) and ( C), as both necessary information for others (who've been asking me the same) and because I'm askin'. Sorry to be a pain in the ass, but who knew? confused.gif

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 05:01 PM

QUOTE (skramz @ Nov 4 2009, 12:16)
Sorry about my inactivity fellas, I know I promised I was going to kick this topic in the ass and get it pumping out the stories but as I've said, I've been busy with preparations for exams and after exams I've got graduation and a formal and also schoolies and a week at the coast with my family.

I'd like to thank Slingaaa, Masterkraft and Colt for steering the BUYG ship. Few laws too lay down;

@tarnell: please prevent yourself from 'spamming' up the thread, we worked very hard to get this thread stickied and I don't want to see it unpinned due to un-needed posting. Post if;

A) You have a story
B) You have a request
C) If it's necessary, enough of this 'NOOOOOOO!' business.

@Osric: We have enough gangs, we just did a huge roster cleanout, if BUYG somehow skyrockets too popularity in the next few weeks then we'll consider adding some more gangs. I'm also unsure what you mean by 'new gangs having one property then adding more as it grows', it was never an old rule to begin with.

Peace ya'll, see you guys in a few weeks,

~Skramz

but seriously dude who the f*ck are you? A mod has allready told me off for that. Dont need you coming here and telling me that again. Seriously I see you in here first time

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 05:18 PM

Tarnell, Hes one of the staff on BUYG, and hes right, the "NOOOOO!" thing is unnecessary and no one wants to f*cking hear it. If a mod has already told you off for it, why come and f*cking do it again? Clever much? suicidal.gif

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 06:27 PM

QUOTE (.2D @ Nov 4 2009, 17:18)
Tarnell, Hes one of the staff on BUYG, and hes right, the "NOOOOO!" thing is unnecessary and no one wants to f*cking hear it. If a mod has already told you off for it, why come and f*cking do it again? Clever much? suicidal.gif

when the f*ck did I do it again? Dude can you just mind your own business please

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 06:52 PM

Wow, f*ck off. smile.gif .

Anyways. Couldnt be arsed to finish off my story, so ill do it tonight or when i can be bothered. biggrin.gif .

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Posted 04 November 2009 - 06:53 PM

cant everyone stop talking about what you did and what you didnt this is a story writing forum not an argument forum

please can someone rate my story

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#1560

Posted 04 November 2009 - 08:33 PM

QUOTE (.2D @ Nov 4 2009, 18:52)
Wow, f*ck off. smile.gif .

Anyways. Couldnt be arsed to finish off my story, so ill do it tonight or when i can be bothered. biggrin.gif .

lol men. Ex brothers (as in bikers lol). Ok so can someone rate my story because i am getting tired of spanish lords now. confused.gif




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