Two of my favorite cities in one chapter? You're spoiling me.
I loved the way this one was segmented from the letter, to Israel, Japan, and then back to the letter.
I particuarly like that with the Tel Aviv job that the assassination was hinted at rather than depicated, as it may have gotten repetative otherwise; it was an excellent way of keeping your reader engaged in the story. All the gun talk was also a nice insight into Raúl's extensive firearm expertise and a good way to show his more clinical side.
The description of Tokyo was brilliant
; I could picture that imagery vividly in my mind's eye. Very well done. And I also liked the powerful Asian man being taken out, it's something I'm always fond of in stories, that no matter how powerful you are, you're not immune to something as simple as being shot in the head. And I think that part of this chapter was sort of metaphoric regarding Raúl and Los Supresores.
And lastly, I like that the letter's addressed to Eduardo. I'm very excited to find out what's coming next!
Edited by Oxidizer, 12 January 2009 - 04:19 PM.